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张逸杰:[国旗下讲话演讲稿] 国旗下的讲话演讲稿

2019年10月20日 12:01

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【真】【题】【展】【示】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【题】【目】【:】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【要】【求】【:】【①】【 】【除】【诗】【歌】【外】【,】【文】【体】【不】【限】【,】【可】【以】【记】【叙】【经】【历】【,】【抒】【发】【感】【情】【,】【发】【表】【见】【解】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【 】【字】【迹】【工】【整】【,】【书】【写】【规】【范】【,】【6】【0】【0】【~】【8】【0】【0】【字】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【 】【文】【中】【不】【要】【出】【现】【真】【实】【的】【人】【名】【、】【校】【名】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【题】【解】【读】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【道】【命】【题】【作】【文】【虽】【然】【一】【点】【儿】【都】【不】【陌】【生】【,】【但】【审】【题】【仍】【需】【谨】【慎】【。】【“】【爱】【”】【是】【作】【文】【的】【中】【心】【,】【“】【时】【间】【”】【是】【文】【章】【的】【线】【索】【,】【“】【同】【行】【”】【是】【要】【求】【把】【“】【爱】【”】【和】【“】【时】【间】【”】【交】【织】【着】【写】【。】【题】【目】【换】【言】【之】【,】【就】【是】【“】【爱】【与】【时】【俱】【进】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【写】【作】【时】【,】【应】【首】【先】【考】【虑】【“】【时】【间】【”】【,】【只】【要】【把】【时】【间】【顺】【序】【安】【排】【好】【了】【,】【作】【文】【就】【有】【了】【思】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【时】【间】【顺】【序】【可】【考】【虑】【以】【下】【几】【点】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【.】【 】【上】【学】【的】【年】【级】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【.】【 】【自】【己】【的】【年】【龄】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【3】【.】【 】【一】【年】【的】【季】【节】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【4】【.】【 】【节】【日】【的】【先】【后】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【因】【为】【体】【现】【“】【爱】【”】【的】【材】【料】【不】【难】【选】【择】【,】【所】【以】【可】【放】【在】【“】【时】【间】【”】【之】【后】【考】【虑】【。】【选】【择】【材】【料】【一】【定】【要】【以】【时】【间】【为】【基】【础】【,】【大】【体】【应】【该】【这】【样】【想】【:】【随】【着】【时】【间】【的】【推】【移】【,】【什】【么】【样】【的】【爱】【在】【加】【深】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【一】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【看】【到】【别】【人】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【我】【总】【爱】【提】【醒】【“】【该】【剪】【头】【发】【了】【”】【。】【因】【为】【对】【头】【发】【我】【有】【一】【段】【难】【忘】【的】【经】【历】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【你】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【走】【,】【妈】【妈】【背】【你】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【。】【”】【这】【时】【,】【我】【会】【愉】【快】【地】【趴】【在】【妈】【妈】【的】【背】【上】【,】【和】【妈】【妈】【一】【起】【去】【理】【发】【店】【。】【因】【为】【我】【知】【道】【,】【你】【去】【也】【得】【去】【,】【不】【去】【也】【得】【去】【,】【痛】【痛】【快】【快】【地】【去】【了】【,】【妈】【妈】【会】【奖】【励】【你】【点】【儿】【什】【么】【,】【如】【雪】【糕】【、】【画】【片】【、】【面】【包】【…】【…】【只】【要】【是】【你】【想】【要】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【你】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【走】【,】【妈】【妈】【领】【你】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【。】【”】【长】【大】【后】【,】【妈】【妈】【这】【样】【对】【我】【说】【。】【这】【时】【,】【我】【会】【把】【手】【伸】【向】【妈】【妈】【,】【她】【便】【拉】【起】【我】【的】【手】【,】【走】【出】【家】【门】【。】【横】【过】【马】【路】【时】【,】【妈】【妈】【叮】【嘱】【我】【:】【“】【等】【对】【面】【的】【灯】【绿】【了】【,】【你】【再】【走】【,】【还】【要】【注】【意】【躲】【避】【两】【边】【拐】【弯】【的】【车】【,】【不】【能】【跑】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【久】【而】【久】【之】【,】【我】【就】【知】【道】【该】【怎】【样】【过】【马】【路】【了】【。】【为】【了】【考】【验】【我】【,】【有】【时】【到】【了】【斑】【马】【线】【,】【她】【会】【故】【意】【加】【快】【速】【度】【往】【前】【走】【,】【这】【时】【我】【就】【拽】【住】【她】【说】【:】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【再】【等】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【灯】【还】【没】【变】【绿】【呢】【!】【”】【她】【转】【过】【头】【笑】【了】【,】【让】【我】【拉】【着】【她】【的】【手】【走】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【我】【的】【头】【发】【太】【长】【了】【,】【陪】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【“】【你】【都】【这】【么】【大】【了】【,】【自】【己】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【妈】【妈】【不】【高】【兴】【地】【说】【。】【“】【不】【嘛】【,】【你】【陪】【我】【去】【。】【”】【“】【你】【不】【怕】【别】【人】【笑】【话】【呀】【,】【这】【么】【大】【了】【还】【要】【人】【陪】【?】【要】【不】【就】【别】【剪】【了】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【看】【看】【镜】【子】【里】【的】【长】【发】【,】【我】【一】【脸】【无】【奈】【,】【只】【好】【懒】【洋】【洋】【地】【自】【己】【去】【了】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【到】【了】【理】【发】【店】【,】【阿】【姨】【说】【:】【“】【你】【长】【大】【了】【,】【孩】【子】【,】【再】【也】【不】【用】【家】【长】【陪】【了】【。】【”】【我】【听】【了】【,】【心】【里】【感】【到】【很】【舒】【服】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【头】【发】【快】【剪】【完】【了】【,】【我】【看】【见】【一】【个】【中】【年】【人】【扶】【着】【一】【位】【爷】【爷】【来】【剪】【头】【发】【。】【两】【个】【人】【都】【小】【心】【翼】【翼】【,】【每】【走】【一】【步】【都】【很】【认】【真】【。】【“】【爸】【,】【慢】【点】【儿】【,】【咱】【不】【着】【急】【,】【看】【好】【脚】【底】【下】【啊】【。】【”】【看】【在】【眼】【里】【,】【我】【的】【心】【动】【了】【一】【下】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【我】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【该】【去】【剪】【剪】【喽】【!】【”】【妈】【妈】【自】【言】【自】【语】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【我】【陪】【你】【去】【。】【”】【我】【放】【下】【手】【中】【的】【笔】【,】【拉】【起】【妈】【妈】【。】【妈】【妈】【看】【着】【我】【,】【一】【脸】【的】【幸】【福】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【现】【在】【我】【明】【白】【了】【:】【妈】【妈】【背】【着】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【让】【我】【知】【道】【你】【只】【有】【去】【做】【才】【能】【得】【到】【你】【想】【要】【的】【。】【妈】【妈】【领】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【让】【我】【懂】【得】【做】【什】【么】【都】【要】【遵】【守】【规】【则】【。】【妈】【妈】【不】【领】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【是】【让】【我】【学】【会】【自】【立】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【长】【大】【了】【,】【妈】【妈】【对】【我】【的】【爱】【更】【深】【了】【,】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【以】【小】【见】【大】【。】【理】【发】【,】【是】【日】【常】【生】【活】【中】【的】【小】【事】【,】【作】【文】【以】【它】【为】【素】【材】【,】【演】【绎】【出】【“】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【”】【的】【主】【题】【,】【可】【谓】【小】【事】【件】【折】【射】【出】【大】【道】【理】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【思】【路】【清】【晰】【。】【妈】【妈】【背】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【—】【妈】【妈】【领】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【—】【妈】【妈】【让】【我】【自】【己】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【文】【章】【写】【得】【有】【条】【不】【紊】【,】【得】【力】【于】【作】【者】【清】【晰】【的】【思】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【情】【真】【意】【切】【。】【考】【生】【从】【剪】【头】【发】【的】【小】【事】【儿】【中】【感】【受】【到】【母】【爱】【,】【从】【中】【年】【人】【领】【着】【父】【亲】【剪】【头】【发】【中】【懂】【得】【了】【感】【恩】【,】【让】【我】【们】【也】【感】【受】【到】【了】【他】【的】【真】【情】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【二】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【0】【5】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【,】【是】【我】【上】【学】【以】【来】【经】【历】【的】【第】【三】【个】【教】【师】【节】【。】【早】【晨】【起】【来】【,】【我】【就】【把】【给】【老】【师】【做】【的】【贺】【卡】【小】【心】【地】【装】【进】【书】【包】【里】【。】【因】【为】【下】【午】【休】【息】【,】【所】【以】【中】【午】【我】【要】【把】【礼】【物】【送】【给】【老】【师】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【丁】【零】【零】【…】【…】【”】【放】【学】【的】【铃】【声】【响】【了】【,】【我】【第】【一】【个】【走】【到】【教】【室】【前】【边】【:】【“】【给】【您】【,】【老】【师】【。】【”】【老】【师】【接】【过】【来】【一】【看】【,】【笑】【了】【,】【因】【为】【我】【在】【贺】【卡】【上】【画】【了】【一】【个】【大】【人】【打】【着】【一】【把】【大】【伞】【,】【伞】【下】【站】【着】【一】【群】【小】【孩】【儿】【。】【老】【师】【笑】【着】【对】【同】【学】【们】【说】【:】【“】【这】【样】【的】【礼】【物】【我】【喜】【欢】【,】【一】【是】【同】【学】【不】【用】【花】【钱】【;】【二】【是】【把】【你】【们】【的】【心】【意】【都】【画】【在】【画】【里】【边】【了】【,】【老】【师】【可】【以】【慢】【慢】【品】【味】【;】【三】【是】【这】【上】【边】【有】【时】【间】【,】【以】【后】【看】【到】【它】【我】【会】【想】【起】【你】【们】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【听】【了】【老】【师】【的】【话】【,】【我】【的】【心】【里】【有】【些】【得】【意】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【0】【8】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【,】【是】【我】【在】【小】【学】【给】【老】【师】【过】【的】【最】【后】【一】【个】【教】【师】【节】【,】【明】【年】【我】【就】【是】【初】【中】【生】【了】【。】【下】【午】【,】【我】【想】【去】【老】【师】【家】【看】【望】【她】【,】【因】【为】【老】【师】【的】【嗓】【子】【最】【近】【有】【些】【哑】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【姥】【爷】【,】【您】【的】【偏】【方】【好】【使】【吗】【?】【这】【可】【是】【给】【老】【师】【用】【的】【啊】【!】【”】【“】【放】【心】【吧】【,】【孩】【子】【,】【你】【姥】【爷】【干】【了】【这】【么】【多】【年】【中】【医】【,】【经】【验】【丰】【富】【着】【呢】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【来】【到】【老】【师】【家】【的】【楼】【下】【,】【碰】【见】【了】【同】【班】【的】【另】【外】【五】【个】【同】【学】【。】【看】【来】【大】【家】【是】【不】【谋】【而】【合】【,】【那】【就】【一】【起】【上】【楼】【吧】【。】【老】【师】【见】【我】【们】【来】【了】【非】【常】【高】【兴】【,】【忙】【着】【给】【我】【们】【找】【饮】【料】【喝】【。】【“】【老】【师】【,】【您】【嗓】【子】【不】【好】【,】【这】【是】【我】【姥】【爷】【给】【您】【的】【偏】【方】【。】【”】【“】【老】【师】【…】【…】【”】【“】【老】【师】【…】【…】【”】【老】【师】【的】【眼】【里】【有】【些】【湿】【润】【了】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【1】【1】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【下】【午】【老】【师】【休】【息】【,】【我】【们】【在】【家】【写】【作】【业】【。】【升】【入】【初】【三】【后】【,】【气】【氛】【紧】【张】【了】【许】【多】【,】【一】【切】【都】【在】【围】【绕】【中】【考】【展】【开】【!】【可】【是】【今】【天】【是】【教】【师】【节】【,】【我】【还】【想】【为】【老】【师】【做】【点】【什】【么】【。】【对】【,】【发】【电】【子】【邮】【件】【,】【将】【我】【的】【祝】【福】【通】【过】【电】【子】【邮】【件】【传】【递】【给】【各】【位】【老】【师】【,】【省】【时】【省】【力】【省】【钱】【。】【说】【做】【就】【做】【,】【几】【分】【钟】【的】【时】【间】【,】【我】【的】【祝】【福】【就】【在】【网】【络】【的】【帮】【助】【下】【送】【到】【了】【老】【师】【的】【面】【前】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【老】【师】【:】【在】【教】【师】【节】【来】【临】【的】【时】【候】【,】【送】【上】【我】【衷】【心】【的】【祝】【福】【。】【有】【人】【说】【你】【们】【是】【园】【丁】【,】【是】【蜡】【烛】【,】【是】【春】【蚕】【…】【…】【但】【人】【们】【只】【看】【到】【了】【你】【们】【奉】【献】【的】【一】【面】【,】【却】【忽】【略】【了】【你】【们】【自】【己】【的】【生】【活】【。】【你】【们】【也】【应】【该】【阳】【光】【、】【时】【尚】【、】【与】【时】【俱】【进】【。】【你】【们】【不】【但】【是】【知】【识】【的】【传】【播】【者】【,】【也】【应】【该】【是】【风】【尚】【盛】【会】【的】【引】【领】【者】【。】【希】【望】【你】【们】【在】【闲】【暇】【的】【时】【候】【也】【能】【走】【进】【K】【T】【V】【,】【一】【展】【别】【样】【的】【风】【采】【。】【再】【一】【次】【地】【祝】【老】【师】【节】【日】【快】【乐】【,】【永】【远】【快】【乐】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【后】【记】【:】【日】【记】【伴】【我】【成】【长】【,】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【串】【编】【日】【记】【。】【写】【日】【记】【简】【单】【,】【串】【编】【起】【来】【,】【就】【不】【简】【单】【了】【。】【从】【日】【记】【的】【时】【间】【节】【点】【上】【,】【我】【们】【不】【难】【看】【出】【作】【者】【构】【思】【的】【巧】【妙】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【巧】【用】【节】【日】【。】【教】【师】【节】【虽】【然】【是】【普】【通】【的】【节】【日】【,】【但】【考】【生】【以】【时】【间】【为】【序】【,】【连】【写】【有】【代】【表】【性】【的】【三】【个】【教】【师】【节】【,】【匠】【心】【之】【处】【,】【可】【见】【一】【斑】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【妙】【用】【后】【记】【。】【写】【完】【日】【记】【,】【言】【犹】【未】【尽】【,】【再】【写】【后】【记】【,】【小】【结】【全】【文】【,】【回】【应】【题】【目】【,】【点】【明】【主】【旨】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【三】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【笔】【与】【纸】【同】【行】【,】【书】【写】【华】【章】【;】【月】【与】【风】【同】【行】【,】【月】【白】【风】【清】【;】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【时】【候】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【叮】【咛】【。】【“】【牛】【奶】【喝】【了】【吗】【?】【一】【杯】【都】【要】【喝】【了】【啊】【。】【”】【“】【喝】【了】【,】【满】【满】【一】【大】【杯】【呢】【!】【”】【 】【“】【书】【和】【作】【业】【本】【都】【装】【书】【包】【里】【了】【?】【上】【次】【你】【把】【语】【文】【书】【落】【在】【家】【里】【了】【,】【害】【得】【我】【跑】【了】【一】【趟】【学】【校】【,】【还】【打】【车】【去】【的】【呢】【。】【”】【“】【放】【心】【吧】【,】【昨】【晚】【我】【就】【收】【拾】【好】【了】【,】【我】【长】【记】【性】【了】【。】【”】【“】【噢】【,】【对】【了】【,】【天】【气】【预】【报】【说】【今】【天】【下】【午】【有】【小】【雨】【,】【你】【把】【伞】【带】【上】【。】【”】【说】【着】【,】【妈】【妈】【把】【伞】【递】【给】【我】【。】【一】【切】【收】【拾】【妥】【当】【,】【我】【说】【:】【“】【妈】【,】【我】【上】【学】【去】【了】【!】【”】【“】【走】【吧】【,】【过】【马】【路】【注】【意】【车】【…】【…】【”】【“】【哎】【,】【带】【水】【了】【吗】【?】【”】【妈】【妈】【又】【追】【出】【来】【。】【“】【带】【了】【,】【放】【心】【吧】【!】【”】【走】【在】【上】【学】【的】【路】【上】【,】【耳】【边】【还】【回】【响】【着】【妈】【妈】【的】【叮】【咛】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【长】【大】【后】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【鼓】【励】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【这】【次】【数】【学】【没】【考】【好】【。】【”】【我】【小】【声】【地】【说】【,】【然】【后】【把】【卷】【子】【递】【给】【她】【。】【妈】【妈】【脸】【色】【很】【难】【看】【,】【眉】【头】【紧】【锁】【,】【接】【过】【卷】【子】【,】【她】【看】【得】【很】【仔】【细】【。】【过】【了】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【她】【舒】【展】【开】【眉】【头】【,】【平】【静】【地】【对】【我】【说】【:】【“】【儿】【子】【,】【这】【次】【的】【确】【考】【得】【差】【了】【些】【。】【你】【看】【这】【道】【题】【,】【你】【能】【不】【会】【吗】【?】【这】【说】【明】【你】【答】【题】【不】【够】【认】【真】【。】【再】【看】【这】【道】【题】【,】【你】【用】【的】【公】【式】【不】【对】【,】【这】【说】【明】【这】【段】【时】【间】【你】【没】【太】【用】【功】【。】【我】【说】【得】【对】【吗】【?】【”】【我】【点】【点】【头】【。】【“】【知】【道】【错】【在】【哪】【儿】【了】【,】【就】【找】【到】【了】【以】【后】【努】【力】【的】【方】【向】【,】【下】【次】【考】【试】【你】【一】【定】【能】【考】【好】【,】【妈】【妈】【相】【信】【你】【!】【”】【我】【听】【了】【,】【心】【里】【暖】【暖】【的】【,】【精】【神】【也】【振】【作】【了】【起】【来】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【而】【现】【在】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【陪】【读】【。】【初】【三】【了】【,】【每】【天】【都】【要】【学】【到】【很】【晚】【。】【我】【不】【睡】【,】【妈】【妈】【也】【不】【睡】【。】【我】【在】【屋】【里】【写】【作】【业】【,】【她】【就】【在】【厅】【里】【干】【这】【干】【那】【的】【,】【不】【闲】【着】【。】【直】【到】【我】【熄】【灯】【睡】【觉】【了】【,】【她】【才】【回】【自】【己】【的】【卧】【室】【睡】【觉】【,】【第】【二】【天】【比】【我】【起】【得】【还】【早】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【你】【不】【用】【陪】【我】【,】【我】【不】【能】【困】【,】【也】【不】【会】【偷】【懒】【,】【你】【回】【屋】【睡】【觉】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【“】【妈】【陪】【你】【是】【自】【己】【心】【里】【踏】【实】【。】【我】【年】【纪】【大】【,】【睡】【觉】【时】【间】【少】【,】【你】【不】【用】【管】【我】【,】【好】【好】【写】【作】【业】【吧】【!】【”】【我】【还】【能】【说】【什】【么】【呢】【,】【妈】【妈】【的】【良】【苦】【用】【心】【我】【怎】【么】【能】【完】【全】【体】【会】【得】【到】【呢】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【时】【光】【如】【流】【水】【而】【去】【,】【爱】【如】【喷】【泉】【涌】【来】【!】【时】【光】【不】【止】【,】【爱】【也】【将】【生】【生】【不】【息】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【章】【学】【余】【光】【中】【《】【乡】【愁】【》】【的】【起】【笔】【方】【法】【,】【把】【时】【间】【交】【代】【得】【清】【清】【楚】【楚】【,】【似】【流】【水】【顺】【势】【而】【下】【。】【内】【容】【分】【为】【三】【个】【部】【分】【,】【构】【成】【排】【比】【段】【,】【增】【强】【了】【文】【势】【,】【并】【紧】【扣】【了】【一】【个】【“】【爱】【”】【字】【。】【开】【头】【用】【了】【铺】【垫】【之】【法】【,】【引】【出】【中】【心】【,】【结】【尾】【用】【比】【喻】【,】【把】【“】【时】【间】【”】【与】【“】【爱】【”】【融】【为】【一】【体】【。】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【是】【什】【么】【?】【可】【以】【是】【飞】【雨】【如】【丝】【,】【清】【新】【凉】【爽】【,】【又】【或】【者】【一】【杯】【温】【茶】【,】【暖】【人】【心】【房】【;】【爱】【是】【什】【么】【?】【可】【以】【是】【殷】【殷】【叮】【嘱】【,】【诚】【心】【祝】【福】【;】【可】【以】【是】【…】【…】【然】【而】【,】【我】【却】【是】【在】【蓦】【然】【醒】【悟】【后】【明】【白】【,】【爱】【是】【默】【默】【无】【语】【间】【,】【绽】【放】【的】【一】【抹】【柔】【彩】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【时】【候】【,】【身】【边】【陪】【伴】【一】【个】【人】【,】【爱】【没】【有】【深】【意】【,】【却】【纯】【净】【轻】【巧】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【那】【时】【,】【不】【懂】【什】【么】【是】【爱】【,】【就】【专】【注】【地】【寻】【找】【。】【仿】【佛】【只】【要】【捕】【捉】【一】【瞬】【蝶】【舞】【,】【一】【声】【鸟】【鸣】【,】【心】【就】【开】【始】【起】【舞】【。】【那】【时】【,】【身】【边】【有】【一】【个】【人】【,】【弯】【着】【布】【满】【皱】【纹】【的】【唇】【角】【,】【仿】【佛】【微】【风】【将】【阳】【光】【带】【入】【了】【她】【的】【眉】【梢】【眼】【角】【,】【带】【入】【了】【她】【满】【脸】【的】【沟】【壑】【,】【她】【却】【不】【是】【深】【奥】【的】【,】【有】【着】【一】【颗】【孩】【童】【的】【心】【,】【欢】【欣】【时】【两】【颗】【心】【雀】【跃】【,】【悲】【伤】【时】【一】【对】【眉】【紧】【蹙】【。】【那】【时】【的】【我】【把】【小】【手】【放】【进】【她】【的】【手】【里】【,】【用】【稚】【嫩】【的】【声】【音】【说】【:】【“】【奶】【奶】【,】【我】【爱】【你】【。】【”】【她】【的】【皱】【纹】【慢】【慢】【地】【舒】【展】【,】【那】【是】【一】【个】【上】【扬】【的】【弧】【度】【。】【那】【个】【春】【天】【,】【院】【子】【里】【的】【槐】【花】【一】【串】【又】【一】【串】【开】【放】【,】【我】【的】【心】【里】【,】【有】【那】【一】【抹】【笑】【,】【没】【有】【任】【何】【语】【言】【的】【表】【达】【,】【是】【最】【美】【的】【色】【彩】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【不】【知】【道】【追】【寻】【的】【爱】【就】【在】【身】【边】【,】【轻】【轻】【吐】【了】【芽】【,】【在】【心】【里】【生】【了】【根】【,】【却】【在】【懵】【懂】【间】【,】【迟】【迟】【没】【有】【绽】【放】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【后】【来】【,】【一】【个】【人】【,】【爱】【是】【思】【念】【,】【系】【在】【心】【房】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【回】【老】【家】【时】【,】【她】【仍】【是】【那】【样】【包】【容】【我】【的】【一】【切】【。】【说】【要】【下】【棋】【,】【她】【便】【拿】【过】【眼】【镜】【,】【研】【究】【起】【棋】【谱】【。】【要】【听】【故】【事】【,】【她】【便】【离】【开】【温】【暖】【的】【被】【窝】【,】【去】【找】【那】【本】【老】【旧】【的】【故】【事】【书】【,】【回】【来】【时】【,】【夜】【已】【深】【沉】【,】【我】【早】【已】【睡】【意】【蒙】【眬】【,】【她】【放】【低】【声】【音】【唱】【起】【童】【谣】【,】【被】【夜】【风】【吹】【得】【冰】【冷】【的】【手】【在】【我】【背】【上】【轻】【拍】【,】【她】【的】【笑】【容】【却】【温】【暖】【而】【美】【好】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【那】【个】【夜】【晚】【,】【门】【缝】【透】【进】【一】【抹】【灯】【光】【,】【说】【话】【声】【传】【来】【:】【“】【妈】【,】【快】【睡】【吧】【,】【半】【夜】【织】【什】【么】【毛】【衣】【?】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【不】【会】【忘】【的】【,】【答】【应】【她】【明】【天】【去】【爬】【山】【,】【要】【早】【起】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【妈】【…】【…】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【先】【睡】【吧】【,】【她】【不】【在】【这】【里】【常】【住】【,】【难】【得】【为】【她】【做】【点】【儿】【什】【么】【。】【我】【的】【孙】【女】【,】【对】【她】【好】【,】【看】【她】【笑】【,】【我】【才】【高】【兴】【。】【”】【声】【音】【里】【是】【倦】【意】【,】【更】【多】【的】【却】【是】【情】【愿】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【透】【过】【灯】【光】【,】【看】【到】【的】【是】【她】【微】【扬】【的】【嘴】【角】【,】【心】【中】【有】【什】【么】【绽】【放】【,】【柔】【软】【的】【、】【安】【静】【的】【,】【仿】【佛】【因】【为】【在】【黑】【暗】【里】【显】【得】【刺】【眼】【的】【灯】【光】【而】【泪】【满】【眼】【眶】【,】【这】【原】【来】【就】【是】【爱】【的】【味】【道】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【总】【是】【这】【样】【,】【她】【包】【容】【着】【她】【的】【孙】【女】【,】【从】【小】【到】【大】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【离】【别】【时】【,】【身】【上】【的】【毛】【衣】【有】【她】【的】【味】【道】【,】【泪】【渗】【进】【故】【乡】【的】【土】【壤】【,】【像】【是】【她】【眼】【中】【的】【水】【光】【,】【缓】【缓】【淌】【进】【岁】【月】【的】【沟】【壑】【。】【爱】【携】【着】【温】【暖】【,】【悄】【悄】【渗】【进】【每】【一】【个】【角】【落】【,】【无】【声】【无】【息】【间】【,】【有】【幸】【福】【萦】【绕】【。】【爱】【是】【什】【么】【仿】【佛】【再】【不】【重】【要】【,】【因】【为】【有】【一】【个】【人】【,】【有】【一】【抹】【微】【笑】【,】【因】【为】【纤】【柔】【静】【默】【,】【爱】【已】【花】【开】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【任】【伟】【建】【)】张逸杰【<】【p】【>】【原】【来】【大】【街】【上】【交】【通】【秩】【序】【非】【常】【乱】【,】【交】【警】【叔】【叔】【不】【仅】【要】【指】【挥】【交】【通】【,】【还】【要】【查】【处】【违】【规】【车】【辆】【,】【人】【们】【认】【为】【耽】【误】【自】【己】【的】【时】【间】【,】【就】【不】【顾】【生】【命】【的】【安】【全】【,】【乱】【闯】【红】【灯】【,】【横】【穿】【马】【路】【,】【导】【致】【道】【路】【发】【生】【堵】【塞】【,】【事】【故】【。】【而】【现】【在】【,】【人】【们】【不】【仅】【不】【横】【穿】【马】【路】【,】【乱】【闯】【红】【灯】【,】【而】【且】【看】【到】【违】【反】【交】【通】【秩】【序】【的】【还】【能】【主】【动】【制】【止】【,】【既】【减】【轻】【了】【警】【察】【叔】【叔】【的】【工】【作】【强】【度】【,】【也】【为】【家】【乡】【徐】【州】【增】【添】【了】【一】【道】【靓】【丽】【的】【风】【景】【线】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【年】【,】【我】【有】【幸】【参】【加】【了】【学】【校】【组】【织】【的】【“】【越】【野】【赛】【”】【,】【并】【取】【得】【年】【级】【组】【第】【三】【名】【的】【好】【成】【绩】【。】【通】【过】【这】【次】【比】【赛】【,】【我】【既】【为】【班】【级】【赢】【得】【了】【荣】【誉】【,】【也】【磨】【炼】【了】【自】【己】【的】【意】【志】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【周】【五】【下】【午】【,】【在】【领】【队】【老】【师】【的】【带】【领】【下】【,】【全】【体】【队】【员】【来】【到】【比】【赛】【场】【地】【准】【备】【比】【赛】【。】【我】【环】【顾】【四】【周】【,】【看】【到】【身】【边】【的】【同】【学】【个】【个】【摩】【拳】【擦】【掌】【,】【跃】【跃】【欲】【试】【,】【忙】【着】【做】【准】【备】【活】【动】【,】【再】【想】【想】【自】【己】【毕】【竟】【是】【第】【一】【次】【参】【加】【越】【野】【赛】【,】【内】【心】【不】【由】【得】【紧】【张】【起】【来】【。】【我】【努】【力】【控】【制】【自】【己】【的】【情】【绪】【并】【暗】【暗】【对】【自】【己】【说】【:】【“】【放】【松】【,】【放】【松】【,】【千】【万】【别】【紧】【张】【!】【”】【就】【在】【此】【时】【,】【只】【听】【到】【发】【令】【员】【一】【声】【 】【:】【“】【各】【就】【各】【位】【,】【预】【备】【—】【—】【”】【发】【令】【枪】【一】【响】【,】【同】【学】【们】【像】【离】【弦】【之】【箭】【一】【样】【冲】【了】【出】【去】【,】【此】【时】【我】【脑】【海】【中】【只】【有】【一】【个】【 】【“】【冲】【”】【字】【,】【 】【我】【凭】【借】【自】【己】【的】【大】【长】【腿】【,】【不】【一】【会】【儿】【就】【冲】【到】【了】【最】【前】【面】【,】【我】【心】【中】【暗】【暗】【高】【兴】【,】【“】【呵】【,】【多】【亏】【了】【自】【己】【赛】【前】【三】【周】【的】【强】【化】【训】【练】【,】【凭】【借】【自】【己】【的】【实】【力】【,】【拿】【个】【第】【一】【名】【绝】【对】【没】【问】【题】【!】【”】【 】【自】【信】【的】【我】【,】【不】【由】【得】【加】【快】【了】【脚】【下】【的】【步】【伐】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【可】【是】【好】【景】【不】【长】【,】【由】【于】【自】【己】【第】【一】【次】【参】【加】【越】【野】【赛】【没】【经】【验】【,】【又】【加】【上】【自】【己】【体】【力】【有】【限】【,】【当】【经】【过】【转】【折】【点】【往】【回】【跑】【的】【途】【中】【,】【我】【就】【感】【到】【有】【点】【儿】【力】【不】【从】【心】【了】【,】【两】【腿】【像】【灌】【了】【铅】【一】【样】【,】【不】【自】【觉】【地】【放】【慢】【了】【脚】【步】【,】【呼】【吸】【也】【变】【得】【急】【促】【起】【来】【,】【喉】【咙】【更】【是】【痒】【得】【难】【受】【。】【就】【这】【样】【,】【眼】【看】【着】【自】【己】【后】【面】【的】【对】【手】【一】【个】【个】【超】【过】【了】【自】【己】【,】【唉】【,】【看】【来】【自】【己】【是】【没】【希】【望】【了】【。】【就】【在】【自】【己】【渐】【渐】【失】【去】【信】【心】【,】【情】【绪】【一】【路】【走】【低】【时】【,】【耳】【边】【忽】【然】【传】【来】【“】【张】【晓】【辉】【,】【加】【油】【,】【加】【油】【!】【为】【了】【班】【级】【荣】【誉】【,】【向】【前】【冲】【啊】【!】【”】【的】【声】【音】【,】【是】【同】【学】【们】【的】【呐】【喊】【助】【威】【声】【,】【我】【抬】【起】【头】【向】【班】【级】【的】【方】【向】【看】【去】【,】【我】【看】【到】【了】【同】【学】【们】【期】【待】【的】【眼】【神】【。】【听】【着】【他】【们】【的】【加】【油】【、】【呐】【喊】【声】【,】【我】【对】【自】【己】【说】【:】【“】【我】【不】【能】【让】【同】【学】【们】【失】【望】【,】【为】【了】【班】【级】【荣】【誉】【,】【我】【拼】【了】【!】【”】【于】【是】【我】【重】【新】【振】【作】【精】【神】【,】【坚】【定】【勇】【往】【直】【前】【的】【信】【心】【,】【向】【着】【终】【点】【奋】【力】【跑】【去】【…】【…】【经】【过】【自】【己】【的】【努】【力】【,】【我】【陆】【续】【超】【过】【了】【前】【面】【的】【几】【个】【同】【学】【,】【最】【终】【获】【得】【了】【年】【级】【组】【的】【第】【三】【名】【,】【那】【时】【我】【的】【心】【中】【涌】【现】【出】【一】【种】【无】【法】【用】【语】【言】【表】【达】【的】【成】【就】【感】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【通】【过】【参】【加】【这】【次】【越】【野】【赛】【,】【我】【想】【告】【诉】【大】【家】【:】【世】【上】【没】【有】【无】【缘】【无】【故】【的】【成】【功】【,】【凡】【是】【成】【功】【者】【背】【后】【必】【定】【要】【付】【出】【大】【量】【的】【汗】【水】【,】【只】【有】【付】【出】【了】【,】【才】【会】【有】【收】【获】【。】【今】【后】【在】【我】【们】【的】【生】【活】【中】【,】【可】【能】【会】【遇】【到】【各】【种】【各】【样】【的】【困】【难】【,】【只】【要】【我】【们】【坚】【定】【信】【心】【,】【奋】【力】【拼】【搏】【,】【就】【一】【定】【会】【战】【胜】【困】【难】【,】【取】【得】【成】【功】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【作】【者】【以】【简】【洁】【的】【语】【言】【,】【叙】【述】【了】【自】【己】【参】【加】【越】【野】【赛】【的】【经】【过】【。】【文】【中】【成】【功】【地】【运】【用】【动】【作】【描】【写】【、】【语】【言】【描】【写】【以】【及】【心】【理】【描】【写】【来】【塑】【造】【人】【物】【形】【象】【,】【特】【别】【是】【心】【理】【描】【写】【,】【刻】【画】【了】【小】【作】【者】【的】【心】【理】【变】【化】【过】【程】【,】【细】【腻】【逼】【真】【。】【结】【尾】【点】【题】【,】【又】【照】【应】【开】【头】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【张】【洪】【新】【)】张逸杰【<】【p】【>】【我】【的】【妈】【妈】【是】【个】【遵】【守】【承】【诺】【的】【人】【,】【每】【次】【许】【诺】【我】【的】【事】【情】【,】【妈】【妈】【总】【会】【尽】【力】【兑】【现】【。】【长】【期】【以】【来】【,】【妈】【妈】【这】【种】【以】【身】【作】【则】【的】【精】【神】【深】【深】【地】【感】【染】【着】【我】【。】【在】【我】【的】【学】【习】【生】【活】【中】【,】【我】【也】【一】【直】【规】【范】【着】【自】【己】【的】【言】【行】【,】【时】【刻】【提】【醒】【自】【己】【要】【做】【一】【个】【诚】【实】【守】【信】【的】【人】【。】【有】【一】【次】【,】【我】【看】【中】【了】【同】【学】【的】【一】【支】【色】【彩】【斑】【斓】【的】【铅】【笔】【,】【就】【提】【出】【用】【一】【支】【多】【色】【自】【动】【圆】【珠】【笔】【和】【她】【交】【换】【。】【晚】【上】【放】【学】【回】【家】【我】【和】【妈】【妈】【说】【了】【这】【件】【事】【,】【才】【得】【知】【那】【支】【笔】【是】【妈】【妈】【从】【韩】【国】【专】【卖】【店】【专】【门】【为】【我】【购】【买】【的】【。】【我】【顿】【时】【觉】【得】【自】【己】【做】【了】【件】【错】【事】【,】【不】【知】【如】【何】【是】【好】【。】【妈】【妈】【看】【出】【了】【我】【的】【犹】【豫】【,】【拉】【着】【我】【的】【手】【温】【柔】【地】【说】【:】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【孩】【子】【,】【别】【心】【烦】【,】【承】【诺】【过】【的】【事】【情】【就】【去】【做】【吧】【!】【别】【让】【同】【学】【失】【望】【!】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【看】【<】【u】【>】【作】【文】【h】【t】【t】【p】【:】【/】【/】【w】【w】【w】【.】【z】【u】【o】【w】【e】【n】【8】【.】【c】【o】【m】【<】【/】【u】【>】【着】【妈】【妈】【坚】【定】【的】【眼】【神】【,】【我】【如】【释】【重】【负】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

张逸杰:【趣味运动会作文】 趣味运动会项目有哪些

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【王】【老】【师】【一】【走】【进】【办】【公】【室】【,】【就】【发】【现】【写】【字】【台】【上】【插】【着】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【。】【她】【将】【花】【儿】【挨】【近】【脸】【庞】【,】【情】【不】【自】【禁】【问】【道】【:】【“】【这】【花】【是】【谁】【送】【的】【?】【”】【办】【公】【室】【里】【静】【悄】【悄】【的】【,】【没】【有】【人】【回】【答】【。】【王】【老】【师】【回】【过】【头】【,】【只】【见】【后】【面】【的】【老】【师】【都】【在】【交】【头】【接】【耳】【,】【议】【论】【纷】【纷】【。】【王】【老】【师】【眉】【头】【一】【皱】【,】【真】【有】【点】【儿】【莫】【名】【其】【妙】【的】【感】【觉】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【王】【老】【师】【注】【视】【着】【这】【束】【玫】【瑰】【花】【,】【突】【然】【觉】【得】【似】【曾】【相】【识】【。】【对】【面】【新】【调】【来】【的】【小】【张】【老】【师】【抬】【起】【头】【来】【,】【推】【了】【推】【眼】【镜】【说】【:】【“】【送】【花】【的】【好】【像】【是】【一】【个】【二】【十】【五】【六】【岁】【的】【小】【伙】【子】【,】【高】【高】【的】【,】【只】【是】【脸】【上】【有】【块】【伤】【疤】【,】【挺】【深】【的】【…】【…】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【伤】【疤】【?】【真】【的】【是】【他】【!】【王】【老】【师】【班】【上】【的】【一】【位】【曾】【被】【公】【认】【“】【不】【可】【教】【”】【的】【差】【生】【—】【—】【宋】【涛】【。】【但】【是】【有】【一】【天】【,】【一】【件】【事】【改】【变】【了】【他】【在】【一】【个】【人】【心】【目】【中】【的】【形】【象】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【那】【天】【,】【王】【老】【师】【推】【着】【车】【回】【家】【,】【当】【时】【学】【校】【正】【施】【工】【建】【房】【。】【当】【她】【经】【过】【工】【地】【时】【,】【一】【块】【砖】【头】【突】【然】【从】【天】【而】【降】【,】【劳】【累】【使】【她】【丝】【毫】【未】【觉】【察】【到】【危】【险】【的】【到】【来】【。】【在】【这】【千】【钧】【一】【发】【之】【际】【,】【宋】【涛】【大】【吼】【一】【声】【:】【“】【王】【老】【师】【,】【危】【险】【!】【”】【然】【后】【一】【个】【箭】【步】【,】【扑】【了】【上】【去】【。】【王】【老】【师】【被】【推】【开】【了】【,】【而】【砖】【头】【却】【无】【情】【地】【砸】【在】【他】【的】【左】【脸】【上】【,】【留】【下】【了】【这】【块】【深】【深】【的】【伤】【疤】【,】【也】【给】【王】【老】【师】【留】【下】【了】【一】【份】【深】【深】【的】【自】【责】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【医】【院】【里】【,】【王】【老】【师】【给】【宋】【涛】【送】【去】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【,】【她】【发】【誓】【要】【将】【他】【改】【变】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【以】【后】【的】【几】【年】【,】【在】【这】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【的】【感】【召】【下】【,】【他】【的】【确】【改】【变】【了】【。】【但】【不】【幸】【的】【是】【,】【一】【次】【偶】【然】【的】【遭】【遇】【使】【他】【陷】【入】【了】【一】【个】【犯】【罪】【集】【团】【的】【泥】【潭】【,】【成】【了】【犯】【罪】【分】【子】【的】【替】【罪】【羔】【羊】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【不】【久】【,】【他】【入】【狱】【了】【。】【入】【狱】【那】【天】【他】【只】【是】【喃】【喃】【地】【念】【着】【自】【己】【的】【名】【字】【:】【“】【宋】【涛】【、】【宋】【涛】【…】【…】【”】【宋】【涛】【是】【“】【松】【涛】【”】【的】【谐】【音】【,】【父】【亲】【给】【他】【取】【的】【,】【因】【为】【父】【亲】【喜】【欢】【松】【树】【,】【更】【希】【望】【自】【己】【的】【儿】【子】【能】【像】【松】【树】【一】【样】【坚】【韧】【、】【挺】【拔】【、】【正】【直】【。】【但】【是】【现】【在】【,】【现】【在】【他】【这】【棵】【松】【树】【要】【输】【给】【狂】【风】【了】【吗】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【他】【的】【入】【狱】【,】【使】【王】【老】【师】【震】【惊】【了】【。】【她】【感】【到】【惭】【愧】【、】【自】【责】【。】【她】【真】【的】【无】【法】【实】【现】【自】【己】【的】【诺】【言】【吗】【?】【每】【次】【看】【到】【宋】【涛】【那】【个】【空】【位】【,】【她】【就】【深】【深】【地】【责】【备】【自】【己】【。】【有】【一】【天】【,】【她】【忽】【然】【想】【到】【要】【去】【看】【看】【他】【,】【仍】【然】【是】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【,】【王】【老】【师】【千】【里】【迢】【迢】【去】【了】【。】【当】【王】【老】【师】【噙】【着】【泪】【水】【将】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【送】【给】【他】【时】【,】【他】【竟】【失】【声】【痛】【哭】【起】【来】【。】【泪】【,】【一】【种】【无】【声】【的】【方】【式】【,】【伴】【随】【他】【们】【度】【过】【了】【这】【一】【难】【忘】【的】【时】【刻】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【玫】【瑰】【的】【红】【,】【玫】【瑰】【的】【情】【,】【玫】【瑰】【的】【自】【尊】【,】【是】【玫】【瑰】【使】【宋】【涛】【像】【松】【树】【一】【样】【抗】【住】【了】【狂】【风】【,】【顶】【住】【了】【惊】【涛】【骇】【浪】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【如】【今】【的】【宋】【涛】【,】【终】【于】【长】【大】【了】【。】【她】【将】【红】【玫】【瑰】【紧】【紧】【地】【挨】【着】【自】【己】【的】【脸】【庞】【,】【流】【着】【泪】【微】【笑】【,】【她】【的】【笑】【就】【像】【这】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【吴】【思】【凡】【同】【学】【写】【的】【是】【一】【篇】【歌】【颂】【师】【爱】【,】【描】【写】【师】【生】【之】【情】【的】【记】【叙】【文】【。】【小】【作】【者】【以】【“】【一】【束】【红】【玫】【瑰】【”】【作】【为】【情】【感】【的】【映】【照】【物】【,】【且】【紧】【紧】【围】【绕】【“】【红】【玫】【瑰】【”】【展】【开】【故】【事】【情】【节】【:】【由】【写】【字】【台】【上】【的】【“】【红】【玫】【瑰】【”】【想】【起】【脸】【上】【有】【伤】【疤】【的】【“】【宋】【涛】【”】【,】【于】【是】【出】【现】【了】【“】【宋】【涛】【”】【勇】【救】【王】【老】【师】【而】【负】【伤】【,】【老】【师】【送】【给】【宋】【涛】【一】【束】【“】【红】【玫】【瑰】【”】【,】【慢】【慢】【地】【改】【变】【“】【宋】【涛】【”】【的】【思】【想】【与】【行】【为】【这】【一】【系】【列】【情】【节】【,】【回】【忆】【这】【些】【令】【人】【心】【颤】【的】【事】【,】【表】【现】【了】【师】【生】【之】【间】【休】【戚】【与】【共】【的】【真】【情】【。】【文】【章】【写】【得】【情】【真】【意】【切】【,】【读】【来】【顺】【畅】【自】【然】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【贵】【有】【真】【情】【,】【无】【情】【难】【为】【好】【文】【章】【。】【在】【生】【活】【中】【我】【们】【要】【做】【有】【心】【人】【、】【热】【心】【人】【,】【要】【用】【真】【情】【体】【验】【生】【活】【,】【这】【样】【写】【出】【来】【的】【文】【章】【才】【能】【打】【动】【人】【,】【才】【能】【叩】【响】【读】【者】【心】【中】【的】【“】【高】【山】【流】【水】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【练】【 】【刚】【)】张逸杰【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【真】【题】【展】【示】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【请】【以】【“】【歌】【从】【心】【底】【唱】【起】【”】【为】【题】【,】【写】【一】【篇】【文】【章】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【要】【求】【:】【①】【 】【立】【意】【自】【定】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【 】【文】【体】【自】【选】【。】【可】【以】【记】【叙】【经】【历】【,】【抒】【发】【感】【情】【,】【发】【表】【议】【论】【,】【展】【开】【想】【象】【等】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【 】【不】【少】【于】【5】【0】【0】【字】【,】【如】【写】【诗】【歌】【,】【不】【少】【于】【2】【0】【行】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【④】【 】【不】【得】【出】【现】【真】【实】【的】【姓】【名】【、】【校】【名】【,】【否】【则】【扣】【分】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【题】【解】【析】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【是】【一】【道】【感】【情】【浓】【郁】【、】【渗】【透】【人】【文】【精】【神】【的】【作】【文】【考】【题】【,】【要】【求】【考】【生】【咏】【唱】【心】【灵】【之】【歌】【,】【表】【达】【人】【间】【真】【情】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【歌】【”】【是】【这】【道】【文】【题】【的】【题】【眼】【,】【也】【是】【审】【题】【立】【意】【的】【关】【键】【。】【“】【歌】【”】【为】【平】【日】【寻】【常】【之】【物】【,】【从】【功】【能】【上】【看】【,】【“】【歌】【”】【可】【以】【咏】【叹】【生】【活】【的】【酸】【甜】【苦】【辣】【,】【也】【可】【以】【抒】【发】【人】【间】【的】【喜】【怒】【哀】【乐】【。】【因】【此】【,】【从】【正】【面】【立】【意】【,】【可】【借】【“】【歌】【”】【来】【唱】【响】【生】【活】【的】【幸】【福】【和】【甜】【美】【;】【从】【反】【面】【立】【意】【,】【可】【借】【“】【歌】【”】【来】【感】【叹】【生】【活】【的】【艰】【辛】【与】【无】【奈】【。】【从】【时】【间】【的】【角】【度】【,】【“】【歌】【”】【可】【以】【穿】【透】【历】【史】【,】【如】【在】【文】【学】【艺】【术】【的】【殿】【堂】【里】【就】【有】【许】【多】【“】【歌】【”】【余】【音】【绕】【梁】【,】【时】【间】【上】【自】【由】【;】【从】【空】【间】【的】【角】【度】【,】【“】【歌】【”】【可】【以】【跨】【越】【地】【域】【,】【如】【真】【情】【的】【“】【歌】【”】【总】【会】【在】【千】【千】【万】【万】【人】【的】【心】【灵】【里】【引】【发】【共】【鸣】【,】【空】【间】【上】【灵】【活】【。】【展】【开】【丰】【富】【的】【联】【想】【与】【想】【象】【,】【我】【们】【会】【发】【觉】【:】【山】【水】【有】【歌】【,】【风】【雨】【有】【歌】【,】【岁】【月】【有】【歌】【,】【亲】【情】【有】【歌】【,】【校】【园】【有】【歌】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【对】【于】【“】【歌】【”】【,】【我】【们】【既】【可】【以】【选】【择】【具】【体】【的】【歌】【,】【进】【行】【实】【写】【;】【也】【可】【以】【对】【它】【的】【引】【申】【义】【、】【比】【喻】【义】【,】【进】【行】【虚】【写】【。】【可】【以】【说】【,】【生】【活】【的】【内】【容】【有】【多】【宽】【,】【“】【从】【心】【底】【唱】【起】【”】【的】【歌】【的】【内】【涵】【就】【有】【多】【宽】【。】【这】【道】【文】【题】【为】【我】【们】【提】【供】【了】【极】【为】【广】【阔】【的】【联】【想】【和】【想】【象】【的】【空】【间】【,】【写】【作】【的】【触】【角】【可】【以】【涉】【及】【自】【然】【、】【人】【生】【、】【历】【史】【、】【社】【会】【等】【各】【个】【方】【面】【。】【我】【们】【可】【以】【根】【据】【自】【身】【特】【点】【,】【选】【择】【最】【擅】【长】【的】【文】【体】【,】【从】【最】【适】【合】【自】【己】【的】【角】【度】【切】【入】【,】【自】【由】【发】【挥】【,】【充】【分】【张】【扬】【个】【性】【,】【展】【示】【自】【我】【的】【风】【采】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【一】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【歌】【从】【心】【底】【唱】【起】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【佛】【山】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【下】【雨】【了】【,】【老】【街】【又】【被】【淹】【成】【一】【道】【小】【溪】【。】【“】【落】【雨】【大】【,】【水】【浸】【街】【,】【阿】【哥】【担】【柴】【上】【街】【卖】【…】【…】【”】【古】【老】【的】【歌】【谣】【从】【心】【底】【里】【唱】【起】【,】【那】【是】【我】【和】【爸】【爸】【之】【间】【的】【歌】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【回】【来】【啦】【。】【”】【爸】【看】【着】【报】【纸】【一】【脸】【严】【肃】【。】【我】【不】【耐】【烦】【地】【答】【应】【了】【一】【声】【,】【锁】【上】【了】【房】【门】【,】【空】【气】【里】【弥】【漫】【着】【一】【种】【莫】【名】【的】【冰】【冷】【。】【坐】【在】【窗】【前】【,】【春】【日】【柔】【情】【的】【雨】【丝】【带】【来】【丝】【丝】【暖】【意】【,】【渐】【渐】【地】【唤】【起】【了】【我】【心】【中】【那】【遗】【失】【的】【美】【好】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【靠】【在】【爸】【的】【背】【上】【,】【小】【小】【的】【我】【紧】【紧】【地】【抓】【住】【爸】【的】【衣】【领】【,】【生】【怕】【一】【不】【小】【心】【便】【掉】【进】【老】【街】【厚】【厚】【的】【积】【水】【中】【。】【“】【落】【雨】【大】【,】【水】【浸】【街】【,】【阿】【哥】【担】【柴】【上】【街】【卖】【…】【…】【”】【爸】【爸】【轻】【轻】【哼】【唱】【着】【,】【轻】【快】【的】【旋】【律】【抚】【平】【了】【我】【皱】【起】【的】【心】【。】【我】【笑】【了】【,】【嘴】【里】【含】【着】【软】【软】【的】【鸡】【汁】【大】【包】【,】【像】【婴】【儿】【牙】【牙】【学】【语】【般】【跟】【着】【哼】【起】【来】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【记】【忆】【中】【的】【画】【面】【总】【是】【如】【此】【美】【好】【,】【告】【别】【老】【街】【,】【那】【些】【温】【暖】【的】【画】【面】【早】【已】【封】【存】【。】【我】【和】【爸】【之】【间】【的】【距】【离】【如】【同】【心】【中】【彼】【此】【熟】【悉】【的】【老】【街】【越】【来】【越】【远】【,】【是】【因】【为】【我】【的】【叛】【逆】【,】【还】【是】【因】【为】【爸】【的】【严】【厉】【管】【束】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【妈】【把】【我】【从】【回】【忆】【中】【唤】【了】【回】【来】【,】【叫】【我】【和】【爸】【到】【老】【街】【上】【拿】【改】【好】【的】【衣】【服】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【到】【了】【老】【街】【街】【口】【,】【爸】【没】【有】【熄】【火】【。】【“】【爸】【,】【还】【是】【一】【起】【下】【车】【吧】【。】【”】【老】【街】【里】【的】【积】【水】【浅】【了】【好】【多】【,】【我】【挽】【着】【爸】【的】【手】【臂】【踮】【起】【脚】【尖】【走】【着】【。】【“】【爸】【,】【还】【记】【得】【那】【歌】【吗】【?】【”】【“】【嗯】【?】【”】【爸】【有】【些】【诧】【异】【。】【“】【落】【雨】【大】【,】【水】【浸】【街】【,】【阿】【爸】【担】【柴】【…】【…】【”】【“】【什】【么】【阿】【爸】【,】【是】【阿】【哥】【!】【”】【爸】【急】【忙】【纠】【正】【。】【我】【尴】【尬】【地】【笑】【,】【又】【哼】【唱】【起】【来】【。】【瞥】【眼】【看】【见】【爸】【的】【嘴】【角】【微】【微】【上】【扬】【,】【嘴】【里】【跟】【着】【轻】【轻】【哼】【唱】【,】【一】【阵】【暖】【风】【拂】【过】【我】【的】【心】【头】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【雨】【点】【越】【来】【越】【浓】【,】【爸】【急】【忙】【送】【我】【上】【车】【,】【又】【奔】【了】【出】【去】【。】【不】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【爸】【回】【来】【了】【,】【“】【来】【,】【你】【爱】【吃】【的】【。】【”】【打】【开】【袋】【子】【,】【是】【热】【烘】【烘】【的】【鸡】【汁】【大】【包】【!】【我】【很】【惊】【讶】【,】【抬】【头】【看】【见】【爸】【满】【足】【的】【笑】【容】【,】【热】【腾】【腾】【的】【白】【气】【熏】【得】【我】【的】【眼】【睛】【酸】【酸】【的】【。】【我】【吃】【着】【包】【子】【,】【耳】【边】【是】【爸】【轻】【轻】【的】【哼】【唱】【声】【,】【我】【知】【道】【,】【爸】【的】【爱】【,】【一】【直】【都】【在】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【雨】【水】【漫】【过】【青】【砖】【碧】【瓦】【,】【在】【老】【街】【里】【静】【静】【地】【淌】【着】【,】【老】【街】【里】【回】【荡】【着】【质】【朴】【的】【旋】【律】【。】【我】【不】【再】【害】【怕】【,】【因】【为】【即】【使】【是】【在】【冰】【冷】【的】【雨】【天】【中】【,】【冷】【清】【的】【街】【道】【里】【,】【那】【首】【温】【暖】【的】【歌】【谣】【也】【会】【从】【心】【底】【里】【唱】【起】【,】【伴】【我】【一】【路】【前】【行】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【章】【开】【篇】【点】【题】【,】【由】【一】【首】【古】【老】【的】【歌】【谣】【写】【起】【,】【通】【过】【插】【叙】【回】【忆】【这】【首】【歌】【谣】【曾】【经】【带】【来】【的】【温】【暖】【感】【受】【,】【接】【着】【写】【在】【老】【街】【里】【“】【我】【”】【与】【爸】【哼】【唱】【这】【首】【歌】【谣】【,】【“】【我】【”】【吃】【着】【爸】【冒】【雨】【买】【来】【的】【包】【子】【,】【明】【白】【爸】【的】【爱】【“】【一】【直】【都】【在】【”】【,】【最】【后】【抒】【发】【这】【首】【歌】【谣】【“】【伴】【我】【一】【路】【前】【行】【”】【的】【真】【感】【情】【。】【文】【中】【歌】【谣】【处】【处】【唱】【起】【,】【贯】【穿】【着】【全】【文】【,】【歌】【不】【但】【从】【“】【我】【”】【的】【嘴】【里】【,】【也】【从】【爸】【的】【心】【底】【唱】【起】【,】【歌】【串】【联】【着】【父】【子】【两】【代】【人】【的】【心】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【中】【两】【个】【画】【面】【描】【写】【得】【相】【对】【集】【中】【,】【前】【后】【映】【衬】【,】【很】【好】【地】【展】【现】【了】【父】【子】【间】【隔】【阂】【的】【冰】【释】【以】【及】【互】【相】【的】【沟】【通】【与】【理】【解】【。】【作】【者】【先】【是】【再】【现】【小】【时】【候】【画】【面】【,】【与】【现】【状】【构】【成】【对】【比】【,】【抒】【发】【对】【父】【爱】【的】【渴】【望】【,】【紧】【接】【着】【集】【中】【笔】【墨】【描】【绘】【“】【我】【”】【与】【爸】【在】【老】【街】【里】【的】【画】【面】【,】【两】【个】【画】【面】【有】【详】【有】【略】【,】【两】【个】【“】【轻】【轻】【哼】【唱】【”】【,】【体】【现】【爸】【一】【贯】【的】【爱】【,】【场】【面】【描】【写】【细】【腻】【,】【生】【活】【现】【场】【感】【强】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【二】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【歌】【从】【心】【底】【唱】【起】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【佛】【山】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【月】【光】【光】【,】【照】【地】【堂】【…】【…】【”】【隔】【壁】【传】【来】【熟】【悉】【的】【童】【谣】【,】【在】【房】【中】【回】【响】【。】【这】【首】【温】【柔】【的】【歌】【在】【此】【时】【却】【不】【断】【撞】【击】【着】【我】【的】【胸】【腔】【,】【也】【如】【一】【根】【无】【形】【的】【棍】【棒】【,】【搅】【拌】【着】【我】【的】【思】【绪】【、】【我】【的】【记】【忆】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【幽】【静】【的】【夏】【夜】【,】【一】【个】【扎】【着】【小】【辫】【儿】【的】【女】【孩】【儿】【坐】【在】【一】【个】【面】【容】【慈】【祥】【的】【老】【人】【怀】【里】【,】【望】【着】【不】【远】【处】【树】【丛】【里】【透】【出】【的】【、】【如】【星】【光】【般】【微】【微】【闪】【烁】【的】【荧】【光】【。】【“】【月】【光】【光】【,】【照】【地】【堂】【…】【…】【”】【爷】【爷】【低】【沉】【、】【略】【带】【沙】【哑】【的】【嗓】【音】【,】【陶】【醉】【地】【轻】【轻】【吟】【唱】【这】【首】【古】【老】【的】【童】【谣】【。】【同】【时】【一】【手】【摇】【着】【大】【蒲】【扇】【,】【一】【手】【抚】【着】【我】【额】【前】【的】【碎】【发】【,】【抚】【走】【了】【我】【心】【中】【的】【燥】【热】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【夏】【夜】【、】【荧】【光】【、】【蒲】【扇】【,】【以】【及】【丝】【线】【般】【的】【童】【谣】【,】【串】【起】【了】【我】【美】【好】【的】【童】【年】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【可】【当】【我】【逐】【渐】【长】【大】【了】【,】【身】【边】【被】【空】【调】【、】【风】【扇】【所】【包】【围】【,】【再】【也】【不】【愿】【去】【门】【口】【享】【受】【那】【夏】【夜】【的】【凉】【风】【。】【爷】【爷】【却】【一】【如】【既】【往】【,】【安】【然】【坐】【在】【门】【口】【的】【石】【阶】【上】【,】【继】【续】【摇】【着】【那】【把】【掉】【了】【线】【的】【蒲】【扇】【。】【而】【我】【已】【很】【少】【与】【爷】【爷】【聊】【天】【,】【听】【他】【唱】【歌】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【一】【天】【,】【我】【在】【学】【校】【接】【到】【了】【一】【个】【不】【祥】【的】【电】【话】【。】【当】【我】【赶】【到】【医】【院】【时】【,】【发】【现】【那】【个】【曾】【经】【让】【我】【骑】【在】【他】【脖】【子】【上】【玩】【耍】【的】【老】【人】【,】【此】【刻】【竟】【躺】【在】【洁】【白】【的】【床】【上】【,】【靠】【床】【边】【的】【营】【养】【液】【维】【持】【生】【命】【,】【病】【房】【里】【挤】【满】【了】【亲】【友】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【他】【的】【头】【发】【仿】【佛】【是】【快】【要】【凋】【零】【的】【芦】【花】【,】【他】【用】【浑】【浊】【的】【眼】【睛】【注】【视】【着】【我】【,】【用】【他】【干】【瘦】【的】【手】【抓】【着】【我】【,】【眼】【中】【闪】【着】【希】【望】【的】【光】【芒】【。】【我】【俯】【下】【身】【,】【听】【到】【他】【艰】【难】【地】【吐】【出】【几】【个】【模】【糊】【的】【音】【节】【。】【我】【强】【忍】【住】【心】【中】【的】【悲】【痛】【,】【轻】【轻】【唱】【出】【那】【曾】【经】【的】【童】【谣】【。】【我】【紧】【抓】【着】【他】【的】【手】【,】【却】【发】【现】【一】【滴】【晶】【莹】【的】【泪】【落】【在】【他】【干】【瘦】【的】【手】【上】【。】【我】【小】【声】【地】【唱】【着】【,】【怕】【惊】【扰】【了】【他】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【后】【,】【他】【在】【歌】【声】【中】【闭】【上】【了】【眼】【,】【带】【着】【笑】【离】【开】【了】【这】【个】【世】【界】【。】【我】【的】【泪】【决】【堤】【般】【汹】【涌】【而】【出】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【想】【,】【若】【是】【再】【给】【我】【一】【次】【机】【会】【,】【我】【一】【定】【会】【大】【声】【地】【歌】【唱】【,】【歌】【唱】【出】【我】【心】【底】【最】【深】【处】【对】【他】【的】【爱】【。】【那】【爱】【,】【也】【如】【那】【首】【古】【老】【的】【歌】【,】【不】【因】【岁】【月】【流】【逝】【而】【被】【遗】【忘】【,】【反】【而】【越】【有】【韵】【味】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【月】【光】【光】【,】【照】【地】【堂】【…】【…】【”】【我】【在】【泪】【光】【中】【轻】【轻】【哼】【唱】【这】【首】【动】【人】【的】【歌】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【写】【作】【时】【用】【情】【要】【真】【挚】【,】【要】【抒】【发】【有】【真】【切】【体】【验】【的】【情】【感】【。】【本】【文】【作】【者】【用】【自】【己】【真】【挚】【的】【心】【写】【文】【章】【,】【用】【自】【己】【真】【实】【的】【情】【写】【文】【章】【,】【从】【日】【常】【生】【活】【场】【景】【中】【选】【择】【几】【个】【具】【有】【典】【型】【意】【义】【的】【片】【段】【来】【描】【写】【,】【自】【我】【情】【感】【在】【事】【件】【的】【铺】【叙】【描】【写】【中】【自】【然】【流】【露】【,】【祖】【孙】【之】【爱】【、】【尊】【老】【爱】【幼】【的】【人】【间】【真】【情】【在】【文】【中】【得】【到】【了】【有】【力】【的】【展】【现】【,】【这】【种】【真】【情】【很】【能】【引】【发】【读】【者】【的】【共】【鸣】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【篇】【文】【章】【能】【够】【打】【动】【读】【者】【,】【要】【源】【于】【作】【者】【对】【细】【节】【的】【刻】【画】【、】【渲】【染】【,】【如】【对】【人】【物】【的】【描】【写】【,】【爷】【爷】【嗓】【音】【“】【低】【沉】【、】【略】【带】【沙】【哑】【”】【,】【爷】【爷】【眼】【睛】【“】【浑】【浊】【”】【,】【“】【闪】【着】【希】【望】【的】【光】【芒】【”】【,】【爷】【爷】【“】【一】【手】【摇】【着】【大】【蒲】【扇】【,】【一】【手】【抚】【着】【我】【额】【前】【的】【碎】【发】【”】【,】【“】【干】【瘦】【的】【手】【抓】【着】【我】【”】【“】【艰】【难】【地】【吐】【出】【”】【,】【这】【些】【神】【态】【、】【动】【作】【,】【细】【腻】【而】【传】【神】【。】【还】【有】【联】【想】【、】【想】【象】【等】【手】【法】【,】【也】【是】【俯】【拾】【皆】【是】【,】【既】【切】【合】【情】【境】【,】【又】【运】【用】【自】【如】【。】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【近】【总】【在】【下】【雨】【,】【雨】【丝】【缠】【缠】【绵】【绵】【地】【飘】【落】【,】【滴】【答】【答】【的】【,】【淋】【得】【温】【柔】【的】【月】【亮】【也】【没】【了】【好】【心】【情】【,】【迟】【迟】【疑】【疑】【地】【,】【到】【了】【很】【晚】【,】【才】【挪】【上】【夜】【的】【舞】【台】【,】【懒】【懒】【地】【洒】【下】【了】【缕】【缕】【银】【辉】【。】【沉】【沉】【的】【夜】【空】【没】【有】【半】【颗】【星】【星】【,】【只】【有】【那】【还】【不】【是】【很】【圆】【的】【月】【亮】【,】【反】【射】【着】【透】【白】【的】【光】【,】【映】【得】【夜】【空】【亮】【亮】【的】【,】【也】【照】【得】【我】【的】【心】【凉】【丝】【丝】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【又】【是】【一】【个】【中】【秋】【,】【又】【是】【一】【个】【本】【该】【团】【聚】【却】【不】【能】【相】【聚】【的】【夜】【。】【也】【许】【是】【“】【每】【逢】【佳】【节】【倍】【思】【亲】【”】【的】【缘】【故】【吧】【,】【我】【真】【的】【有】【点】【儿】【想】【家】【了】【,】【想】【那】【院】【中】【老】【冬】【枣】【树】【婆】【娑】【的】【身】【影】【,】【想】【那】【树】【梢】【上】【温】【和】【微】【笑】【的】【月】【亮】【,】【想】【那】【树】【下】【其】【乐】【融】【融】【的】【温】【馨】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【月】【很】【大】【但】【不】【是】【很】【圆】【,】【月】【光】【顽】【皮】【而】【轻】【柔】【地】【挑】【弄】【着】【爸】【妈】【嘴】【角】【的】【笑】【意】【。】【妈】【妈】【在】【厨】【房】【与】【院】【子】【间】【来】【回】【穿】【梭】【不】【停】【,】【边】【忙】【得】【不】【亦】【乐】【乎】【,】【边】【招】【呼】【着】【偷】【闲】【的】【爸】【爸】【,】【顺】【带】【着】【又】【塞】【给】【我】【一】【块】【圆】【溜】【溜】【的】【月】【饼】【。】【正】【闲】【适】【地】【翘】【着】【二】【郎】【腿】【看】【报】【的】【老】【爸】【,】【听】【到】【妈】【妈】【的】【命】【令】【,】【一】【点】【儿】【也】【不】【敢】【怠】【慢】【,】【匆】【匆】【起】【身】【,】【还】【不】【忘】【拉】【上】【我】【帮】【他】【跑】【腿】【儿】【,】【美】【其】【名】【曰】【:】【锻】【炼】【身】【体】【。】【在】【一】【边】【的】【外】【公】【笑】【弯】【了】【眉】【,】【他】【也】【没】【闲】【着】【,】【拿】【着】【把】【剪】【刀】【侍】【弄】【着】【那】【老】【得】【弯】【了】【腰】【的】【枣】【树】【。】【“】【咔】【嚓】【咔】【嚓】【”】【的】【声】【音】【在】【静】【静】【的】【夜】【空】【里】【,】【和】【着】【远】【处】【隐】【隐】【约】【约】【的】【蛙】【鸣】【,】【很】【是】【动】【听】【。】【微】【风】【吹】【过】【,】【带】【着】【些】【许】【暖】【暖】【的】【凉】【意】【,】【枣】【树】【在】【风】【中】【轻】【轻】【点】【了】【点】【头】【,】【似】【乎】【在】【笑】【道】【:】【“】【瞧】【,】【这】【一】【家】【子】【!】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【月】【亮】【微】【微】【地】【透】【了】【些】【黄】【黄】【的】【色】【泽】【,】【像】【旧】【了】【些】【的】【灯】【,】【静】【静】【地】【挂】【在】【老】【枣】【树】【最】【高】【的】【梢】【上】【,】【闪】【着】【更】【暖】【的】【温】【馨】【。】【枣】【树】【下】【,】【圆】【桌】【上】【的】【小】【盘】【越】【来】【越】【多】【,】【满】【满】【地】【摆】【了】【一】【桌】【我】【爱】【吃】【的】【东】【西】【。】【妈】【妈】【一】【个】【劲】【儿】【地】【给】【我】【夹】【菜】【,】【小】【小】【的】【碗】【里】【堆】【起】【了】【高】【高】【的】【一】【层】【,】【她】【似】【乎】【也】【没】【注】【意】【。】【爸】【爸】【总】【是】【那】【么】【幽】【默】【风】【趣】【,】【他】【口】【若】【悬】【河】【地】【讲】【述】【千】【奇】【百】【怪】【的】【趣】【事】【,】【加】【上】【他】【形】【象】【逼】【真】【的】【动】【作】【,】【不】【时】【把】【正】【在】【吃】【菜】【的】【我】【逗】【呛】【,】【妈】【妈】【则】【在】【一】【边】【又】【是】【给】【我】【拍】【背】【,】【又】【是】【给】【我】【递】【水】【,】【爱】【怜】【地】【说】【:】【“】【慢】【慢】【吃】【,】【小】【心】【点】【儿】【…】【…】【”】【那】【真】【是】【绝】【妙】【的】【享】【受】【,】【尽】【管】【我】【呛】【得】【上】【气】【不】【接】【下】【气】【,】【眼】【泪】【鼻】【涕】【一】【大】【把】【。】【而】【外】【公】【是】【最】【沉】【默】【的】【,】【他】【总】【是】【什】【么】【也】【不】【说】【,】【坐】【在】【树】【下】【静】【静】【地】【品】【着】【他】【的】【酒】【,】【暖】【暖】【的】【笑】【在】【他】【脸】【上】【溅】【起】【了】【一】【层】【又】【一】【层】【密】【密】【的】【涟】【漪】【。】【我】【像】【小】【大】【人】【似】【的】【站】【起】【来】【给】【外】【公】【敬】【酒】【,】【盛】【着】【鲜】【艳】【果】【汁】【的】【玻】【璃】【杯】【与】【瓷】【制】【的】【酒】【杯】【相】【撞】【,】【击】【起】【动】【听】【的】【声】【音】【。】【果】【汁】【隔】【着】【晶】【莹】【的】【玻】【璃】【跳】【动】【,】【杯】【中】【的】【酒】【使】【空】【气】【里】【弥】【漫】【了】【厚】【厚】【的】【醇】【香】【。】【饭】【桌】【上】【的】【主】【角】【是】【那】【些】【金】【灿】【灿】【的】【月】【饼】【,】【我】【最】【爱】【那】【豆】【沙】【蛋】【黄】【口】【味】【的】【,】【隔】【着】【层】【薄】【薄】【的】【豆】【沙】【便】【能】【嗅】【到】【蛋】【黄】【软】【软】【的】【香】【气】【,】【咬】【在】【嘴】【里】【酥】【酥】【的】【,】【有】【说】【不】【出】【的】【甜】【蜜】【。】【我】【暗】【暗】【地】【对】【着】【月】【亮】【祈】【祷】【,】【希】【望】【时】【间】【真】【的】【可】【以】【暂】【停】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【月】【亮】【爬】【得】【更】【高】【,】【一】【层】【轻】【纱】【似】【的】【云】【使】【得】【月】【光】【更】【加】【朦】【胧】【、】【神】【秘】【,】【月】【亮】【眨】【巴】【着】【眼】【睛】【,】【透】【过】【那】【层】【面】【纱】【俯】【瞰】【着】【大】【地】【。】【但】【月】【下】【已】【不】【是】【那】【弯】【腰】【的】【老】【枣】【树】【,】【不】【是】【那】【丰】【盛】【的】【圆】【桌】【,】【不】【是】【一】【家】【人】【的】【团】【聚】【。】【在】【凉】【凉】【的】【月】【光】【下】【,】【苦】【涩】【地】【隔】【着】【电】【话】【向】【妈】【妈】【道】【完】【“】【中】【秋】【快】【乐】【”】【,】【我】【机】【械】【地】【吞】【下】【那】【曾】【经】【最】【爱】【的】【蛋】【黄】【月】【饼】【,】【却】【不】【再】【觉】【得】【它】【有】【先】【前】【的】【酥】【香】【与】【甜】【蜜】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【月】【光】【越】【过】【层】【层】【叠】【叠】【孤】【寂】【的】【教】【学】【楼】【,】【洒】【向】【了】【那】【曾】【溢】【出】【欢】【笑】【的】【院】【子】【。】【我】【衷】【心】【地】【祝】【愿】【那】【老】【枣】【树】【下】【的】【一】【家】【永】【远】【快】【乐】【、】【温】【馨】【、】【和】【谐】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【徐】【杰】【同】【学】【的】【仿】【写】【之】【作】【《】【月】【·】【思】【》】【叙】【写】【的】【是】【一】【个】【外】【出】【求】【学】【的】【孩】【子】【在】【中】【秋】【之】【夜】【思】【念】【一】【家】【人】【团】【聚】【的】【往】【事】【,】【情】【真】【意】【切】【,】【读】【来】【温】【馨】【而】【感】【人】【。】【小】【作】【者】【模】【仿】【运】【用】【了】【《】【月】【是】【故】【乡】【明】【》】【中】【的】【对】【比】【手】【法】【,】【一】【是】【开】【头】【与】【结】【尾】【对】【比】【照】【应】【,】【二】【是】【首】【尾】【的】【写】【景】【与】【主】【体】【内】【容】【也】【形】【成】【鲜】【明】【对】【比】【,】【这】【样】【写】【更】【能】【抒】【发】【出】【作】【者】【对】【昔】【日】【中】【秋】【一】【家】【人】【温】【馨】【和】【谐】【的】【思】【念】【之】【情】【。】【另】【外】【,】【本】【文】【的】【语】【言】【也】【有】【可】【取】【之】【处】【,】【如】【“】【那】【真】【是】【绝】【妙】【的】【享】【受】【,】【尽】【管】【我】【呛】【得】【上】【气】【不】【接】【下】【气】【,】【眼】【泪】【鼻】【涕】【一】【大】【把】【”】【几】【句】【,】【写】【得】【尤】【其】【生】【动】【活】【泼】【,】【读】【来】【使】【人】【忍】【俊】【不】【禁】【,】【也】【使】【文】【章】【增】【色】【不】【少】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【冯】【汝】【汉】【)】张逸杰【<】【p】【>】【谁】【知】【,】【妈】【妈】【听】【到】【以】【后】【不】【仅】【没】【有】【连】【声】【夸】【赞】【我】【,】【反】【而】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【噗】【嗤】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【一】【声】【地】【笑】【了】【,】【看】【着】【我】【好】【笑】【地】【说】【:】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【傻】【孩】【子】【,】【只】【有】【种】【子】【才】【会】【结】【果】【,】【铅】【笔】【只】【能】【写】【,】【可】【不】【能】【种】【,】【更】【不】【会】【长】【成】【铅】【笔】【树】【啊】【!】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【我】【听】【到】【后】【感】【觉】【恍】【然】【大】【悟】【,】【却】【依】【旧】【保】【持】【着】【一】【副】【懵】【懂】【的】【表】【情】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

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【<】【p】【>】【生】【活】【处】【处】【皆】【学】【问】【,】【词】【语】【用】【得】【恰】【当】【不】【恰】【当】【这】【里】【头】【也】【有】【一】【些】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【学】【问】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【,】【哦】【不】【,】【应】【该】【说】【词】【语】【用】【得】【恰】【不】【恰】【当】【这】【里】【头】【的】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【学】【问】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【可】【大】【着】【呢】【!】【可】【又】【有】【什】【么】【学】【问】【呢】【?】【让】【我】【们】【通】【过】【一】【个】【有】【趣】【的】【游】【戏】【亲】【身】【体】【会】【体】【会】【吧】【!】【<】【/】【p】【>】张逸杰【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【真】【题】【展】【示】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【题】【目】【:】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【要】【求】【:】【①】【 】【除】【诗】【歌】【外】【,】【文】【体】【不】【限】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【 】【感】【情】【真】【挚】【,】【不】【得】【抄】【袭】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【 】【不】【少】【于】【6】【0】【0】【字】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【④】【 】【文】【中】【不】【得】【出】【现】【真】【实】【的】【人】【名】【、】【校】【名】【和】【地】【名】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【题】【解】【读】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【”】【是】【一】【个】【动】【宾】【短】【语】【,】【题】【目】【省】【略】【了】【主】【语】【,】【体】【现】【了】【命】【题】【者】【对】【考】【生】【的】【人】【文】【关】【怀】【,】【为】【考】【生】【提】【供】【了】【广】【阔】【的】【写】【作】【空】【间】【,】【具】【有】【强】【烈】【的】【抒】【情】【意】【味】【和】【思】【维】【的】【发】【散】【性】【。】【发】【散】【思】【维】【的】【关】【键】【是】【要】【打】【破】【思】【维】【的】【定】【式】【,】【改】【变】【单】【一】【的】【思】【维】【方】【式】【,】【尽】【可】【能】【地】【拓】【展】【思】【路】【,】【从】【同】【一】【问】【题】【的】【各】【个】【角】【度】【、】【各】【个】【方】【面】【、】【各】【个】【层】【次】【进】【行】【,】【或】【顺】【向】【、】【逆】【向】【、】【纵】【向】【、】【横】【向】【的】【思】【考】【,】【从】【而】【获】【得】【众】【多】【的】【独】【特】【新】【颖】【的】【材】【料】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【构】【思】【时】【,】【首】【先】【,】【针】【对】【宾】【语】【“】【你】【”】【是】【谁】【,】【可】【从】【人】【、】【景】【、】【物】【三】【个】【角】【度】【发】【散】【:】【可】【以】【选】【择】【与】【亲】【人】【、】【师】【长】【、】【朋】【友】【、】【对】【手】【等】【交】【往】【的】【材】【料】【来】【写】【,】【也】【可】【以】【选】【择】【给】【人】【以】【生】【活】【乐】【趣】【或】【启】【示】【的】【动】【物】【、】【植】【物】【这】【类】【材】【料】【来】【写】【;】【可】【以】【选】【择】【有】【生】【命】【意】【趣】【的】【物】【品】【,】【像】【舞】【台】【、】【传】【媒】【、】【书】【、】【乐】【器】【、】【画】【笔】【、】【某】【件】【纪】【念】【品】【等】【材】【料】【来】【写】【,】【也】【可】【以】【选】【择】【抚】【慰】【心】【灵】【、】【寄】【放】【情】【感】【的】【自】【然】【山】【水】【、】【日】【月】【星】【辰】【、】【城】【市】【乡】【村】【等】【材】【料】【来】【写】【,】【还】【可】【以】【选】【择】【事】【业】【、】【诗】【歌】【、】【感】【情】【等】【抽】【象】【事】【物】【来】【写】【。】【如】【果】【“】【你】【”】【指】【代】【的】【是】【某】【个】【人】【,】【那】【必】【须】【是】【“】【单】【数】【(】【个】【体】【)】【”】【,】【不】【能】【写】【成】【“】【复】【数】【(】【群】【体】【)】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【其】【次】【,】【针】【对】【主】【语】【—】【—】【谁】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【”】【,】【也】【可】【从】【人】【、】【环】【境】【、】【事】【物】【三】【个】【角】【度】【发】【散】【:】【可】【以】【从】【“】【我】【”】【是】【主】【语】【的】【角】【度】【切】【入】【,】【也】【可】【以】【不】【一】【定】【写】【“】【我】【”】【,】【譬】【如】【一】【个】【民】【族】【不】【能】【没】【有】【为】【之】【骄】【傲】【的】【伟】【人】【,】【一】【个】【时】【代】【不】【能】【没】【有】【思】【想】【的】【先】【驱】【,】【航】【天】【事】【业】【不】【能】【没】【有】【忠】【诚】【敬】【业】【的】【科】【技】【人】【才】【,】【广】【阔】【天】【空】【不】【能】【没】【有】【流】【云】【、】【飞】【鸟】【等】【等】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【后】【,】【要】【明】【确】【写】【作】【的】【主】【体】【是】【作】【谓】【语】【的】【双】【重】【否】【定】【词】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【”】【,】【也】【就】【是】【要】【浓】【墨】【重】【彩】【地】【写】【为】【什】【么】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【”】【,】【可】【从】【因】【果】【关】【系】【、】【假】【设】【关】【系】【、】【转】【折】【关】【系】【、】【条】【件】【关】【系】【等】【角】【度】【思】【考】【,】【抓】【住】【“】【你】【”】【的】【外】【在】【特】【征】【,】【写】【出】【“】【你】【”】【的】【内】【在】【品】【质】【,】【写】【出】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【”】【的】【理】【由】【依】【据】【,】【即】【阐】【明】【“】【你】【”】【的】【重】【要】【性】【。】【行】【文】【时】【,】【或】【运】【用】【真】【情】【动】【人】【法】【,】【带】【着】【真】【情】【去】【构】【思】【,】【捕】【捉】【生】【活】【中】【的】【闪】【光】【点】【,】【采】【撷】【真】【情】【的】【花】【朵】【,】【从】【而】【打】【动】【阅】【卷】【老】【师】【的】【心】【,】【得】【到】【阅】【卷】【老】【师】【的】【青】【睐】【;】【或】【运】【用】【细】【节】【描】【写】【技】【法】【,】【抓】【住】【“】【你】【”】【生】【活】【中】【的】【细】【微】【而】【又】【具】【体】【的】【典】【型】【情】【节】【,】【加】【以】【生】【动】【细】【致】【的】【描】【写】【,】【既】【能】【使】【人】【物】【形】【象】【栩】【栩】【如】【生】【,】【又】【能】【深】【刻】【地】【反】【映】【出】【人】【物】【形】【象】【的】【本】【质】【特】【征】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【一】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【扬】【州】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【你】【总】【是】【习】【惯】【嘴】【角】【上】【扬】【2】【5】【°】【,】【你】【总】【是】【习】【惯】【眼】【睛】【闭】【合】【1】【5】【°】【;】【你】【曾】【经】【在】【我】【身】【边】【,】【抚】【平】【我】【心】【灵】【的】【伤】【痛】【,】【驱】【赶】【我】【灵】【魂】【的】【黑】【暗】【。】【然】【而】【,】【自】【负】【蒙】【蔽】【了】【双】【眼】【,】【好】【强】【塞】【住】【了】【双】【耳】【,】【我】【坚】【定】【地】【告】【诉】【你】【,】【我】【不】【再】【需】【要】【你】【了】【。】【我】【没】【有】【发】【现】【你】【的】【落】【寞】【与】【伤】【心】【,】【就】【这】【样】【疏】【远】【了】【你】【。】【远】【离】【,】【冷】【漠】【,】【你】【最】【后】【还】【是】【悄】【悄】【离】【开】【了】【我】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【当】【现】【实】【的】【风】【雨】【折】【断】【理】【想】【的】【翅】【膀】【,】【当】【世】【俗】【的】【高】【墙】【阻】【挡】【前】【行】【的】【道】【路】【,】【我】【的】【心】【变】【得】【空】【虚】【而】【寂】【寞】【,】【我】【才】【发】【现】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【。】【我】【在】【心】【底】【召】【唤】【,】【踏】【遍】【千】【山】【万】【水】【,】【只】【为】【寻】【找】【你】【的】【身】【影】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【一】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【新】【学】【期】【来】【临】【,】【班】【里】【转】【来】【一】【个】【新】【同】【学】【。】【曾】【经】【和】【我】【一】【样】【也】【是】【“】【冷】【血】【动】【物】【”】【,】【从】【来】【不】【和】【同】【学】【们】【交】【流】【,】【也】【从】【不】【和】【同】【学】【们】【玩】【耍】【。】【可】【是】【,】【我】【看】【到】【了】【你】【的】【身】【影】【出】【现】【在】【他】【的】【身】【边】【。】【我】【看】【到】【你】【向】【他】【伸】【出】【了】【友】【谊】【之】【手】【,】【嘴】【角】【禁】【不】【住】【上】【扬】【2】【5】【°】【,】【眼】【睛】【禁】【不】【住】【闭】【合】【1】【5】【°】【,】【告】【诉】【他】【,】【欢】【迎】【他】【加】【入】【我】【们】【这】【个】【新】【集】【体】【。】【他】【看】【着】【你】【,】【显】【得】【有】【些】【诧】【异】【,】【不】【过】【还】【是】【伸】【出】【了】【友】【谊】【之】【手】【。】【后】【来】【,】【我】【渐】【渐】【发】【现】【他】【开】【始】【融】【入】【新】【环】【境】【,】【他】【变】【得】【开】【朗】【了】【。】【我】【才】【发】【现】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【,】【因】【为】【你】【可】【以】【打】【开】【陌】【生】【人】【的】【心】【扉】【,】【展】【开】【一】【次】【真】【诚】【的】【心】【灵】【对】【话】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【二】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【那】【场】【演】【讲】【比】【赛】【上】【,】【我】【的】【心】【跳】【得】【很】【厉】【害】【,】【甚】【至】【喘】【不】【过】【气】【来】【。】【轮】【到】【我】【了】【,】【我】【慢】【慢】【地】【走】【上】【讲】【台】【,】【咽】【了】【咽】【吐】【沫】【,】【看】【着】【台】【下】【黑】【压】【压】【的】【一】【片】【,】【我】【慌】【了】【。】【我】【的】【脑】【海】【里】【白】【茫】【茫】【一】【片】【,】【竟】【不】【知】【从】【何】【说】【起】【。】【主】【持】【人】【不】【断】【地】【催】【促】【我】【,】【我】【更】【紧】【张】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【扫】【了】【一】【眼】【台】【下】【的】【观】【众】【,】【在】【人】【群】【中】【找】【到】【了】【你】【。】【你】【依】【然】【嘴】【角】【上】【扬】【2】【5】【°】【,】【眼】【睛】【闭】【合】【1】【5】【°】【,】【从】【你】【的】【眼】【睛】【里】【我】【看】【到】【了】【信】【任】【和】【鼓】【励】【。】【我】【深】【吸】【了】【一】【口】【气】【,】【好】【像】【台】【下】【只】【有】【你】【一】【个】【人】【,】【紧】【张】【的】【心】【情】【慢】【慢】【平】【静】【下】【来】【,】【终】【于】【开】【始】【了】【我】【的】【演】【讲】【。】【演】【讲】【中】【,】【我】【也】【是】【嘴】【角】【上】【扬】【2】【5】【°】【,】【眼】【睛】【闭】【合】【1】【5】【°】【。】【演】【讲】【完】【毕】【,】【我】【听】【到】【了】【台】【下】【的】【掌】【声】【,】【我】【知】【道】【成】【功】【了】【。】【在】【人】【群】【中】【搜】【索】【你】【的】【身】【影】【,】【你】【正】【在】【为】【我】【鼓】【掌】【呢】【!】【我】【渐】【渐】【地】【发】【现】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【,】【因】【为】【你】【能】【给】【我】【勇】【气】【和】【信】【心】【,】【去】【收】【获】【成】【功】【的】【掌】【声】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【三】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 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】【“】【你】【”】【是】【谁】【呢】【?】【直】【至】【读】【完】【全】【文】【,】【方】【揭】【开】【谜】【底】【,】【这】【样】【层】【层】【设】【置】【悬】【念】【,】【有】【助】【于】【吸】【引】【读】【者】【的】【阅】【读】【兴】【趣】【。】【行】【文】【的】【重】【点】【落】【实】【在】【“】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【”】【上】【,】【与】【“】【我】【”】【的】【行】【为】【举】【止】【相】【比】【照】【,】【使】【文】【章】【的】【中】【心】【更】【加】【突】【出】【。】【文】【章】【采】【用】【自】【然】【分】【段】【的】【方】【式】【,】【不】【用】【任】【何】【过】【渡】【,】【也】【不】【显】【别】【扭】【,】【相】【反】【还】【大】【大】【增】【加】【了】【文】【章】【的】【内】【在】【张】【力】【。】【另】【外】【,】【运】【用】【生】【动】【而】【形】【象】【的】【比】【喻】【也】【使】【文】【章】【增】【色】【不】【少】【,】【是】【一】【篇】【不】【可】【多】【见】【的】【应】【试】【佳】【作】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【二】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【扬】【州】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【你】【,】【总】【是】【默】【默】【地】【付】【出】【,】【细】【心】【地】【照】【顾】【着】【我】【们】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【好】【儿】【媳】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爷】【爷】【年】【老】【多】【病】【,】【早】【已】【不】【能】【像】【正】【常】【人】【一】【样】【生】【活】【,】【你】【总】【是】【默】【默】【地】【伺】【候】【着】【爷】【爷】【,】【付】【出】【了】【宝】【贵】【的】【青】【春】【。】【爸】【爸】【总】【是】【劝】【你】【说】【:】【“】【还】【是】【去】【请】【个】【保】【姆】【吧】【,】【这】【样】【你】【就】【不】【用】【这】【么】【累】【了】【。】【”】【你】【却】【说】【:】【“】【保】【姆】【哪】【比】【得】【上】【儿】【媳】【妇】【啊】【!】【要】【是】【受】【了】【什】【么】【气】【,】【说】【不】【定】【还】【要】【报】【复】【到】【公】【公】【身】【上】【呢】【!】【比】【如】【在】【喂】【饭】【时】【把】【饭】【很】【用】【力】【地】【塞】【进】【公】【公】【嘴】【里】【,】【在】【公】【公】【喝】【水】【时】【把】【他】【呛】【到】【…】【…】【”】【爸】【爸】【笑】【着】【摇】【摇】【头】【:】【“】【老】【爸】【他】【啊】【,】【有】【一】【个】【好】【儿】【媳】【妇】【。】【”】【妈】【妈】【转】【头】【看】【爸】【爸】【:】【“】【那】【你】【呢】【?】【”】【爸】【爸】【故】【意】【扯】【开】【嗓】【子】【说】【:】【“】【我】【有】【一】【个】【好】【妻】【子】【,】【幸】【福】【死】【了】【。】【”】【妈】【妈】【甜】【蜜】【地】【笑】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【好】【妻】【子】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【d】【a】【r】【l】【i】【n】【g】【,】【 】【快】【来】【帮】【我】【系】【领】【带】【,】【我】【赶】【时】【间】【开】【会】【。】【”】【爸】【爸】【急】【切】【地】【喊】【,】【妈】【妈】【箭】【一】【般】【从】【厨】【房】【奔】【回】【卧】【室】【,】【气】【喘】【吁】【吁】【地】【说】【:】【“】【什】【么】【事】【儿】【啊】【?】【”】【爸】【爸】【指】【了】【指】【领】【带】【,】【摆】【出】【一】【副】【可】【怜】【巴】【巴】【的】【样】【子】【。】【妈】【妈】【叹】【气】【:】【“】【都】【那】【么】【大】【的】【人】【了】【,】【领】【带】【还】【不】【会】【打】【,】【找】【空】【儿】【好】【好】【学】【学】【。】【”】【爸】【爸】【笑】【着】【说】【:】【“】【不】【用】【学】【,】【我】【爱】【妻】【系】【领】【带】【的】【水】【平】【超】【一】【流】【。】【”】【妈】【妈】【笑】【着】【帮】【爸】【爸】【一】【边】【系】【,】【一】【边】【说】【:】【“】【就】【会】【贫】【嘴】【,】【你】【看】【你】【,】【领】【子】【都】【没】【弄】【好】【,】【这】【样】【怎】【么】【去】【开】【会】【见】【人】【啊】【?】【”】【爸】【爸】【依】【旧】【乐】【呵】【呵】【,】【为】【什】【么】【呢】【,】【当】【然】【是】【因】【为】【他】【娶】【了】【个】【关】【心】【自】【己】【的】【好】【妻】【子】【喽】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【好】【妈】【妈】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 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】【这】【篇】【考】【场】【作】【文】【的】【最】【大】【特】【色】【是】【以】【小】【见】【大】【,】【在】【叙】【事】【中】【透】【过】【平】【凡】【的】【现】【象】【挖】【出】【不】【平】【凡】【的】【本】【质】【,】【使】【主】【题】【深】【刻】【。】【文】【章】【选】【择】【妈】【妈】【为】【写】【作】【的】【对】【象】【,】【选】【取】【家】【庭】【生】【活】【中】【的】【小】【事】【儿】【,】【叙】【写】【“】【作】【为】【好】【儿】【媳】【,】【默】【默】【地】【为】【公】【公】【付】【出】【;】【作】【为】【好】【妻】【子】【,】【真】【心】【地】【关】【心】【丈】【夫】【;】【作】【为】【好】【妈】【妈】【,】【细】【心】【地】【照】【顾】【子】【女】【”】【的】【细】【节】【来】【表】【现】【妈】【妈】【的】【美】【好】【情】【操】【,】【读】【来】【让】【人】【真】【切】【地】【感】【受】【到】【了】【亲】【情】【的】【伟】【大】【,】【从】【而】【有】【力】【地】【凸】【显】【了】【“】【我】【们】【不】【能】【没】【有】【你】【”】【的】【深】【刻】【内】【涵】【。】

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【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【真】【题】【展】【示】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【题】【目】【:】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【要】【求】【:】【①】【 】【除】【诗】【歌】【外】【,】【文】【体】【不】【限】【,】【可】【以】【记】【叙】【经】【历】【,】【抒】【发】【感】【情】【,】【发】【表】【见】【解】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【②】【 】【字】【迹】【工】【整】【,】【书】【写】【规】【范】【,】【6】【0】【0】【~】【8】【0】【0】【字】【;】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【③】【 】【文】【中】【不】【要】【出】【现】【真】【实】【的】【人】【名】【、】【校】【名】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【题】【解】【读】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【道】【命】【题】【作】【文】【虽】【然】【一】【点】【儿】【都】【不】【陌】【生】【,】【但】【审】【题】【仍】【需】【谨】【慎】【。】【“】【爱】【”】【是】【作】【文】【的】【中】【心】【,】【“】【时】【间】【”】【是】【文】【章】【的】【线】【索】【,】【“】【同】【行】【”】【是】【要】【求】【把】【“】【爱】【”】【和】【“】【时】【间】【”】【交】【织】【着】【写】【。】【题】【目】【换】【言】【之】【,】【就】【是】【“】【爱】【与】【时】【俱】【进】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【写】【作】【时】【,】【应】【首】【先】【考】【虑】【“】【时】【间】【”】【,】【只】【要】【把】【时】【间】【顺】【序】【安】【排】【好】【了】【,】【作】【文】【就】【有】【了】【思】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【时】【间】【顺】【序】【可】【考】【虑】【以】【下】【几】【点】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【1】【.】【 】【上】【学】【的】【年】【级】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【.】【 】【自】【己】【的】【年】【龄】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【3】【.】【 】【一】【年】【的】【季】【节】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【4】【.】【 】【节】【日】【的】【先】【后】【顺】【序】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【因】【为】【体】【现】【“】【爱】【”】【的】【材】【料】【不】【难】【选】【择】【,】【所】【以】【可】【放】【在】【“】【时】【间】【”】【之】【后】【考】【虑】【。】【选】【择】【材】【料】【一】【定】【要】【以】【时】【间】【为】【基】【础】【,】【大】【体】【应】【该】【这】【样】【想】【:】【随】【着】【时】【间】【的】【推】【移】【,】【什】【么】【样】【的】【爱】【在】【加】【深】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【一】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【看】【到】【别】【人】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【我】【总】【爱】【提】【醒】【“】【该】【剪】【头】【发】【了】【”】【。】【因】【为】【对】【头】【发】【我】【有】【一】【段】【难】【忘】【的】【经】【历】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【你】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【走】【,】【妈】【妈】【背】【你】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【。】【”】【这】【时】【,】【我】【会】【愉】【快】【地】【趴】【在】【妈】【妈】【的】【背】【上】【,】【和】【妈】【妈】【一】【起】【去】【理】【发】【店】【。】【因】【为】【我】【知】【道】【,】【你】【去】【也】【得】【去】【,】【不】【去】【也】【得】【去】【,】【痛】【痛】【快】【快】【地】【去】【了】【,】【妈】【妈】【会】【奖】【励】【你】【点】【儿】【什】【么】【,】【如】【雪】【糕】【、】【画】【片】【、】【面】【包】【…】【…】【只】【要】【是】【你】【想】【要】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【你】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【走】【,】【妈】【妈】【领】【你】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【。】【”】【长】【大】【后】【,】【妈】【妈】【这】【样】【对】【我】【说】【。】【这】【时】【,】【我】【会】【把】【手】【伸】【向】【妈】【妈】【,】【她】【便】【拉】【起】【我】【的】【手】【,】【走】【出】【家】【门】【。】【横】【过】【马】【路】【时】【,】【妈】【妈】【叮】【嘱】【我】【:】【“】【等】【对】【面】【的】【灯】【绿】【了】【,】【你】【再】【走】【,】【还】【要】【注】【意】【躲】【避】【两】【边】【拐】【弯】【的】【车】【,】【不】【能】【跑】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【久】【而】【久】【之】【,】【我】【就】【知】【道】【该】【怎】【样】【过】【马】【路】【了】【。】【为】【了】【考】【验】【我】【,】【有】【时】【到】【了】【斑】【马】【线】【,】【她】【会】【故】【意】【加】【快】【速】【度】【往】【前】【走】【,】【这】【时】【我】【就】【拽】【住】【她】【说】【:】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【再】【等】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【灯】【还】【没】【变】【绿】【呢】【!】【”】【她】【转】【过】【头】【笑】【了】【,】【让】【我】【拉】【着】【她】【的】【手】【走】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【妈】【妈】【,】【我】【的】【头】【发】【太】【长】【了】【,】【陪】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【“】【你】【都】【这】【么】【大】【了】【,】【自】【己】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【妈】【妈】【不】【高】【兴】【地】【说】【。】【“】【不】【嘛】【,】【你】【陪】【我】【去】【。】【”】【“】【你】【不】【怕】【别】【人】【笑】【话】【呀】【,】【这】【么】【大】【了】【还】【要】【人】【陪】【?】【要】【不】【就】【别】【剪】【了】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【看】【看】【镜】【子】【里】【的】【长】【发】【,】【我】【一】【脸】【无】【奈】【,】【只】【好】【懒】【洋】【洋】【地】【自】【己】【去】【了】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【到】【了】【理】【发】【店】【,】【阿】【姨】【说】【:】【“】【你】【长】【大】【了】【,】【孩】【子】【,】【再】【也】【不】【用】【家】【长】【陪】【了】【。】【”】【我】【听】【了】【,】【心】【里】【感】【到】【很】【舒】【服】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【头】【发】【快】【剪】【完】【了】【,】【我】【看】【见】【一】【个】【中】【年】【人】【扶】【着】【一】【位】【爷】【爷】【来】【剪】【头】【发】【。】【两】【个】【人】【都】【小】【心】【翼】【翼】【,】【每】【走】【一】【步】【都】【很】【认】【真】【。】【“】【爸】【,】【慢】【点】【儿】【,】【咱】【不】【着】【急】【,】【看】【好】【脚】【底】【下】【啊】【。】【”】【看】【在】【眼】【里】【,】【我】【的】【心】【动】【了】【一】【下】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【我】【的】【头】【发】【长】【了】【,】【该】【去】【剪】【剪】【喽】【!】【”】【妈】【妈】【自】【言】【自】【语】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【我】【陪】【你】【去】【。】【”】【我】【放】【下】【手】【中】【的】【笔】【,】【拉】【起】【妈】【妈】【。】【妈】【妈】【看】【着】【我】【,】【一】【脸】【的】【幸】【福】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【现】【在】【我】【明】【白】【了】【:】【妈】【妈】【背】【着】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【让】【我】【知】【道】【你】【只】【有】【去】【做】【才】【能】【得】【到】【你】【想】【要】【的】【。】【妈】【妈】【领】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【让】【我】【懂】【得】【做】【什】【么】【都】【要】【遵】【守】【规】【则】【。】【妈】【妈】【不】【领】【我】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【是】【让】【我】【学】【会】【自】【立】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【长】【大】【了】【,】【妈】【妈】【对】【我】【的】【爱】【更】【深】【了】【,】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【以】【小】【见】【大】【。】【理】【发】【,】【是】【日】【常】【生】【活】【中】【的】【小】【事】【,】【作】【文】【以】【它】【为】【素】【材】【,】【演】【绎】【出】【“】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【”】【的】【主】【题】【,】【可】【谓】【小】【事】【件】【折】【射】【出】【大】【道】【理】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【思】【路】【清】【晰】【。】【妈】【妈】【背】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【—】【妈】【妈】【领】【我】【剪】【头】【发】【—】【妈】【妈】【让】【我】【自】【己】【去】【剪】【头】【发】【,】【文】【章】【写】【得】【有】【条】【不】【紊】【,】【得】【力】【于】【作】【者】【清】【晰】【的】【思】【路】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【情】【真】【意】【切】【。】【考】【生】【从】【剪】【头】【发】【的】【小】【事】【儿】【中】【感】【受】【到】【母】【爱】【,】【从】【中】【年】【人】【领】【着】【父】【亲】【剪】【头】【发】【中】【懂】【得】【了】【感】【恩】【,】【让】【我】【们】【也】【感】【受】【到】【了】【他】【的】【真】【情】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【二】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【0】【5】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【,】【是】【我】【上】【学】【以】【来】【经】【历】【的】【第】【三】【个】【教】【师】【节】【。】【早】【晨】【起】【来】【,】【我】【就】【把】【给】【老】【师】【做】【的】【贺】【卡】【小】【心】【地】【装】【进】【书】【包】【里】【。】【因】【为】【下】【午】【休】【息】【,】【所】【以】【中】【午】【我】【要】【把】【礼】【物】【送】【给】【老】【师】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【丁】【零】【零】【…】【…】【”】【放】【学】【的】【铃】【声】【响】【了】【,】【我】【第】【一】【个】【走】【到】【教】【室】【前】【边】【:】【“】【给】【您】【,】【老】【师】【。】【”】【老】【师】【接】【过】【来】【一】【看】【,】【笑】【了】【,】【因】【为】【我】【在】【贺】【卡】【上】【画】【了】【一】【个】【大】【人】【打】【着】【一】【把】【大】【伞】【,】【伞】【下】【站】【着】【一】【群】【小】【孩】【儿】【。】【老】【师】【笑】【着】【对】【同】【学】【们】【说】【:】【“】【这】【样】【的】【礼】【物】【我】【喜】【欢】【,】【一】【是】【同】【学】【不】【用】【花】【钱】【;】【二】【是】【把】【你】【们】【的】【心】【意】【都】【画】【在】【画】【里】【边】【了】【,】【老】【师】【可】【以】【慢】【慢】【品】【味】【;】【三】【是】【这】【上】【边】【有】【时】【间】【,】【以】【后】【看】【到】【它】【我】【会】【想】【起】【你】【们】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【听】【了】【老】【师】【的】【话】【,】【我】【的】【心】【里】【有】【些】【得】【意】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【0】【8】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【,】【是】【我】【在】【小】【学】【给】【老】【师】【过】【的】【最】【后】【一】【个】【教】【师】【节】【,】【明】【年】【我】【就】【是】【初】【中】【生】【了】【。】【下】【午】【,】【我】【想】【去】【老】【师】【家】【看】【望】【她】【,】【因】【为】【老】【师】【的】【嗓】【子】【最】【近】【有】【些】【哑】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【姥】【爷】【,】【您】【的】【偏】【方】【好】【使】【吗】【?】【这】【可】【是】【给】【老】【师】【用】【的】【啊】【!】【”】【“】【放】【心】【吧】【,】【孩】【子】【,】【你】【姥】【爷】【干】【了】【这】【么】【多】【年】【中】【医】【,】【经】【验】【丰】【富】【着】【呢】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【来】【到】【老】【师】【家】【的】【楼】【下】【,】【碰】【见】【了】【同】【班】【的】【另】【外】【五】【个】【同】【学】【。】【看】【来】【大】【家】【是】【不】【谋】【而】【合】【,】【那】【就】【一】【起】【上】【楼】【吧】【。】【老】【师】【见】【我】【们】【来】【了】【非】【常】【高】【兴】【,】【忙】【着】【给】【我】【们】【找】【饮】【料】【喝】【。】【“】【老】【师】【,】【您】【嗓】【子】【不】【好】【,】【这】【是】【我】【姥】【爷】【给】【您】【的】【偏】【方】【。】【”】【“】【老】【师】【…】【…】【”】【“】【老】【师】【…】【…】【”】【老】【师】【的】【眼】【里】【有】【些】【湿】【润】【了】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【2】【0】【1】【1】【年】【9】【月】【1】【0】【日】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【今】【天】【下】【午】【老】【师】【休】【息】【,】【我】【们】【在】【家】【写】【作】【业】【。】【升】【入】【初】【三】【后】【,】【气】【氛】【紧】【张】【了】【许】【多】【,】【一】【切】【都】【在】【围】【绕】【中】【考】【展】【开】【!】【可】【是】【今】【天】【是】【教】【师】【节】【,】【我】【还】【想】【为】【老】【师】【做】【点】【什】【么】【。】【对】【,】【发】【电】【子】【邮】【件】【,】【将】【我】【的】【祝】【福】【通】【过】【电】【子】【邮】【件】【传】【递】【给】【各】【位】【老】【师】【,】【省】【时】【省】【力】【省】【钱】【。】【说】【做】【就】【做】【,】【几】【分】【钟】【的】【时】【间】【,】【我】【的】【祝】【福】【就】【在】【网】【络】【的】【帮】【助】【下】【送】【到】【了】【老】【师】【的】【面】【前】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【老】【师】【:】【在】【教】【师】【节】【来】【临】【的】【时】【候】【,】【送】【上】【我】【衷】【心】【的】【祝】【福】【。】【有】【人】【说】【你】【们】【是】【园】【丁】【,】【是】【蜡】【烛】【,】【是】【春】【蚕】【…】【…】【但】【人】【们】【只】【看】【到】【了】【你】【们】【奉】【献】【的】【一】【面】【,】【却】【忽】【略】【了】【你】【们】【自】【己】【的】【生】【活】【。】【你】【们】【也】【应】【该】【阳】【光】【、】【时】【尚】【、】【与】【时】【俱】【进】【。】【你】【们】【不】【但】【是】【知】【识】【的】【传】【播】【者】【,】【也】【应】【该】【是】【风】【尚】【盛】【会】【的】【引】【领】【者】【。】【希】【望】【你】【们】【在】【闲】【暇】【的】【时】【候】【也】【能】【走】【进】【K】【T】【V】【,】【一】【展】【别】【样】【的】【风】【采】【。】【再】【一】【次】【地】【祝】【老】【师】【节】【日】【快】【乐】【,】【永】【远】【快】【乐】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【后】【记】【:】【日】【记】【伴】【我】【成】【长】【,】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【串】【编】【日】【记】【。】【写】【日】【记】【简】【单】【,】【串】【编】【起】【来】【,】【就】【不】【简】【单】【了】【。】【从】【日】【记】【的】【时】【间】【节】【点】【上】【,】【我】【们】【不】【难】【看】【出】【作】【者】【构】【思】【的】【巧】【妙】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【巧】【用】【节】【日】【。】【教】【师】【节】【虽】【然】【是】【普】【通】【的】【节】【日】【,】【但】【考】【生】【以】【时】【间】【为】【序】【,】【连】【写】【有】【代】【表】【性】【的】【三】【个】【教】【师】【节】【,】【匠】【心】【之】【处】【,】【可】【见】【一】【斑】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【妙】【用】【后】【记】【。】【写】【完】【日】【记】【,】【言】【犹】【未】【尽】【,】【再】【写】【后】【记】【,】【小】【结】【全】【文】【,】【回】【应】【题】【目】【,】【点】【明】【主】【旨】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【【】【考】【场】【佳】【作】【三】【】】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【○】【 】【沈】【阳】【一】【考】【生】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【笔】【与】【纸】【同】【行】【,】【书】【写】【华】【章】【;】【月】【与】【风】【同】【行】【,】【月】【白】【风】【清】【;】【爱】【与】【时】【间】【同】【行】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【小】【时】【候】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【叮】【咛】【。】【“】【牛】【奶】【喝】【了】【吗】【?】【一】【杯】【都】【要】【喝】【了】【啊】【。】【”】【“】【喝】【了】【,】【满】【满】【一】【大】【杯】【呢】【!】【”】【 】【“】【书】【和】【作】【业】【本】【都】【装】【书】【包】【里】【了】【?】【上】【次】【你】【把】【语】【文】【书】【落】【在】【家】【里】【了】【,】【害】【得】【我】【跑】【了】【一】【趟】【学】【校】【,】【还】【打】【车】【去】【的】【呢】【。】【”】【“】【放】【心】【吧】【,】【昨】【晚】【我】【就】【收】【拾】【好】【了】【,】【我】【长】【记】【性】【了】【。】【”】【“】【噢】【,】【对】【了】【,】【天】【气】【预】【报】【说】【今】【天】【下】【午】【有】【小】【雨】【,】【你】【把】【伞】【带】【上】【。】【”】【说】【着】【,】【妈】【妈】【把】【伞】【递】【给】【我】【。】【一】【切】【收】【拾】【妥】【当】【,】【我】【说】【:】【“】【妈】【,】【我】【上】【学】【去】【了】【!】【”】【“】【走】【吧】【,】【过】【马】【路】【注】【意】【车】【…】【…】【”】【“】【哎】【,】【带】【水】【了】【吗】【?】【”】【妈】【妈】【又】【追】【出】【来】【。】【“】【带】【了】【,】【放】【心】【吧】【!】【”】【走】【在】【上】【学】【的】【路】【上】【,】【耳】【边】【还】【回】【响】【着】【妈】【妈】【的】【叮】【咛】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【长】【大】【后】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【鼓】【励】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【这】【次】【数】【学】【没】【考】【好】【。】【”】【我】【小】【声】【地】【说】【,】【然】【后】【把】【卷】【子】【递】【给】【她】【。】【妈】【妈】【脸】【色】【很】【难】【看】【,】【眉】【头】【紧】【锁】【,】【接】【过】【卷】【子】【,】【她】【看】【得】【很】【仔】【细】【。】【过】【了】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【她】【舒】【展】【开】【眉】【头】【,】【平】【静】【地】【对】【我】【说】【:】【“】【儿】【子】【,】【这】【次】【的】【确】【考】【得】【差】【了】【些】【。】【你】【看】【这】【道】【题】【,】【你】【能】【不】【会】【吗】【?】【这】【说】【明】【你】【答】【题】【不】【够】【认】【真】【。】【再】【看】【这】【道】【题】【,】【你】【用】【的】【公】【式】【不】【对】【,】【这】【说】【明】【这】【段】【时】【间】【你】【没】【太】【用】【功】【。】【我】【说】【得】【对】【吗】【?】【”】【我】【点】【点】【头】【。】【“】【知】【道】【错】【在】【哪】【儿】【了】【,】【就】【找】【到】【了】【以】【后】【努】【力】【的】【方】【向】【,】【下】【次】【考】【试】【你】【一】【定】【能】【考】【好】【,】【妈】【妈】【相】【信】【你】【!】【”】【我】【听】【了】【,】【心】【里】【暖】【暖】【的】【,】【精】【神】【也】【振】【作】【了】【起】【来】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【而】【现】【在】【,】【母】【爱】【是】【陪】【读】【。】【初】【三】【了】【,】【每】【天】【都】【要】【学】【到】【很】【晚】【。】【我】【不】【睡】【,】【妈】【妈】【也】【不】【睡】【。】【我】【在】【屋】【里】【写】【作】【业】【,】【她】【就】【在】【厅】【里】【干】【这】【干】【那】【的】【,】【不】【闲】【着】【。】【直】【到】【我】【熄】【灯】【睡】【觉】【了】【,】【她】【才】【回】【自】【己】【的】【卧】【室】【睡】【觉】【,】【第】【二】【天】【比】【我】【起】【得】【还】【早】【。】【“】【妈】【,】【你】【不】【用】【陪】【我】【,】【我】【不】【能】【困】【,】【也】【不】【会】【偷】【懒】【,】【你】【回】【屋】【睡】【觉】【去】【吧】【。】【”】【“】【妈】【陪】【你】【是】【自】【己】【心】【里】【踏】【实】【。】【我】【年】【纪】【大】【,】【睡】【觉】【时】【间】【少】【,】【你】【不】【用】【管】【我】【,】【好】【好】【写】【作】【业】【吧】【!】【”】【我】【还】【能】【说】【什】【么】【呢】【,】【妈】【妈】【的】【良】【苦】【用】【心】【我】【怎】【么】【能】【完】【全】【体】【会】【得】【到】【呢】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【时】【光】【如】【流】【水】【而】【去】【,】【爱】【如】【喷】【泉】【涌】【来】【!】【时】【光】【不】【止】【,】【爱】【也】【将】【生】【生】【不】【息】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【章】【学】【余】【光】【中】【《】【乡】【愁】【》】【的】【起】【笔】【方】【法】【,】【把】【时】【间】【交】【代】【得】【清】【清】【楚】【楚】【,】【似】【流】【水】【顺】【势】【而】【下】【。】【内】【容】【分】【为】【三】【个】【部】【分】【,】【构】【成】【排】【比】【段】【,】【增】【强】【了】【文】【势】【,】【并】【紧】【扣】【了】【一】【个】【“】【爱】【”】【字】【。】【开】【头】【用】【了】【铺】【垫】【之】【法】【,】【引】【出】【中】【心】【,】【结】【尾】【用】【比】【喻】【,】【把】【“】【时】【间】【”】【与】【“】【爱】【”】【融】【为】【一】【体】【。】

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